Topic: Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and

motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree ?

In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on which
areas, roads or public transport governemnts should invest in. I do think that both two
areas are equally important and should be equally invested.  giỏi nha
Commented [i1]: Them in some countries vào

Hoặc là in certain developing countries like Vietnam

On the other hand, it is important for governments to spend money in roads and Commented [i2]: Lo viết cho đúng spelling đồ nha

motorway, especially when road quality is teribly bad and needs repairing. In fact, there Commented [i3]: Có hiểu sao, causing k đó, k hiểu là lo hỏi
liền nha,
are many potholes causing more and more accidents every year and make people Commented [i4]: Nghe cái cụm này nó kì kì
dangerous when we join the traffic, which viably leads to disaster seriously . Endanger traffic participants’ safety

Furthermore, widening the roads and motorways enhances such commercial activites Make traffic participants unsafe
among areas and helps the economy develop quickly. For example, Singapor, a
And these potholes have made ….
countries has a modern traffic with total length is more 3.000 kilometres that promotes
Commented [i5]: We gì mà we
the openness of the economy and business co-operation with foreign countries.  ê vì They
Commented [i6]: Tự nhiên chọt cái seriously vào hay vậy
sao mà đường tốt thì openness business em, viết là phải explain ra chứ k có để
Viably leads to serious/ deadly disasters
examiners tự hiểu đâu nha
Commented [i7]: Such ở đây chứ còn as để đi đâu rồi em
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On the other hand, I also assumed that public transport systems also needs improving. Commented [i9]: Quá khứ đâu ra , sai
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This is because more and more people who are sometimes workers and the poor use
It is also nêcssary for …. To be improved
means of transportations as a way to save a lot of money or office staff do it to keep
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their time to arrive on time every day. To illustrate, using public transport means that
Commented [i11]: Poor people
commuters have to pay for monthly maintenance cost and the increasing number of Commented [i12]: Public transportation
private vehicles causes traffic jam and waste time of traffic participants, which Commented [i13]: Mà câu này viết lủng củng quá, viết lại
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negatively affects to officer. Conversely, public transport systems like bus or trains
Commented [i14]: Bỏ
reduce pollution, and then help enviromental quality better. For instance, Japan where Commented [i15]: Public mà maintenance cost gì em ơi ,
sai mà câu này nó cũng lủng củng nữa
main means of transportation of human is bus and subways. This is reasons why the
Commented [i16]: Sai grammar wastes
astmosphere here is fresh and have no terrifying scence. Commented [i17]: Lên Cambridge tra từ affect xem, sai
Commented [i18]: Quality become better
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In conclusion, for the reasons above, I suppose money should be spent both roads,
Commented [i20]: Are chứ
motorway and public transport systems. Commented [i21]: Is crystal clear