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Persuasive essay about social media(The Final Version)

Inhyup Kim
Instructor: Professor Crane
English 1010
04 June 2012
Persuasive essay about social media
Nowadays, many people are using social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Tumbler, and so on.
Since the Internet has rapidly propagated, social media has progressed rapidly. The widespread use of
mobile devices to access the internet gradually transformed the nature of our social interactions. Most
people use smart phones, i-phones or mobile internet devices to easily access social network. It helps us
contact friends, family, and other people even if they live far away. Social media has many advantages;
nevertheless, it can be abused in moments by young children if we are not careful, because they can easily
access social media. We need to understand and regulate the use of social media by young children.
In discussions of social media, one controversial issue has been social media is good to use for
children. On the one hand, some people argue social media is okay for children to use freely. On the other
hand, other people even contend social media is for children to use with regulation. My own view is that we
should understand and regulating the use of social media by young children, because overusing social
media can create strong addictions, develop mental or physical disorders, and waste our time.
First of all, social media, such as Facebook, are very addictive. Especially, people who are lonely
can become easily addicts. Human is social animal, so they want to make relationship with others. People
would say drug or alcohol is more addictive and harmful for children than social media; social media
addiction is not a big problem. Unfortunately, it is not true. Social media can lead to compulsive behavior.
A report of the social media addiction by University of Chicago’s Booth School of Business says: “There is
evidence to show as well that social behaviours like hugs and smiles are associated with dopamine release
… it’s possible that social media is pleasurable and becomes addictive via the dopamine mechanism just
as drugs or alcohol can(Fekken).” In the light of these facts, surely social media can make addicts, and it is
hard to escape. The problem is most people who have an addiction to social media and do not even realize
it.
Children, also, can easily get mental and physical disorders through using social media. People
might think social media does not contribute to disorders. They argue that social media is good for mental
diseases because it help them express their feelings or thought easily. Also, through social media, they can
be more connected with each other. However, as stated above, if children become addicts, naturally we
could think they have emotional instability. Social media offers limited real interaction, through online
contact. On the Mental Health Blog, psychologist, Aric Sigman claimed “Spending too much time online
could lead to social isolation, loneliness and a negative outlook. These types of psychological symptoms
could eventually lead to more serious health concerns, such as heart disease, cancer and
dementia.(Sigman)” Using social media disturbs make deep relationship with others. When they are using
social media they do not need to move or be active. As a result, it leads to mental and physical disorders.
Social media can become handicap in our life. In this sense, social media can hinder people to
improve their talents. People think social media is good place to show their talents or works what they did.
For example, they argue people can share video clip what they playing the instruments or dancing or
singing. However, if you are not good at those things and if you spend time to do social media, it would be
hard to improve your talents. Using social media steals your time what really want to do. If you do not pay
attention, your time would go very fast, and it could not be returned. If you read books, or study, exercise,
or practice something that you want to do instead of using social media, it would be much better for you
and your future life.
I conducted surveys about relationships between using social media and studying last semester.
Most students answered using social media is not helpful for studying. Also, students who got good grades
spent just a little time to use social media. These results can be adjusted to young children because they
are more easily influenced by social media.
Question #5: Using the Social Network helps you in your work and studies

18 ~ 24 year-old = 20 25~30 year-old = 5 Over 30 year-old = 5


Agree No Disagree Agree No Disagree Agree No Disagree
opinion opinion opinion
2 7 11 3 1 1 1 1 3
10% 35% 55% 60% 20% 20% 20% 20% 60%

Question #6: Using the Social Network helps you in your work and studies

GPA (0 ~ 2.0) = 0 GPA (2.1 ~ 3.5) = 19 GPA ( over 3.6) = 11


Agree No Disagree Agree No Disagree Agree No Disagree
opinion opinion opinion
0 0 0 5 6 8 1 3 6
0% 0% 0% 26% 32% 42% 9% 27% 64%
Fig.1 “Survey Research Paper Write-up”
Especially, the young generation and children are easy to be exposed to environments which
using social media. Social media are favorite not only along with teens or youngsters; it is growing among
working people and also adults. Social media is regarded as an addiction and many people are becoming
addicts every day. It can occur mentally and physically and make you waste time. As you can see, we need
to understand and regulate the use of social media by young children.

Works cited
Epstein, Zach. " Facebook and Twitter are more addictive than cigarettes or alcohol, study finds." Fox News, 06 Feb.
2012. Web. 13 June. 2012.
Sigman, Aric. "Is Facebook Really Bad For Your Health?" Mental Health Blog, 25 Feb. 2009. Web. 13 June. 2012.