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Newland- Persepolis 36 of 100


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Contextual Spelling 21
Misspelled Words 15
Commonly Confused Words 4
Confused Words 2

Grammar 5
Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, etc.) 1
Incorrect Noun Number 1
Pronoun Use 1
Faulty Subject-Verb Agreement 1
Incorrect Verb Forms 1

Punctuation 9
Comma Misuse within Clauses 5
Punctuation in Compound/Complex Sentences 4

Sentence Structure 2
Incomplete Sentences 1
Misplaced Words or Phrases 1

Style 38
Inappropriate Colloquialisms 21
Improper Formatting 13
Passive Voice Misuse 3
Wordy Sentences 1

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Newland- Persepolis
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In persepolis 1 book 1 3 2 the demonstrators are seen at 4 [persepolis → Persepolis]
2
heroic by the people. Loud and unhelpful by the gov’t. In [1 → one]
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[1,]
Persepolis books one and two it talks about marjane 5 4
Possibly confused word
satrapi's 6 story and what it was like in Iran. The 5
[marjane → Marjane]
government was awful to the people especially women. 6
[satrapi's → Satrapi's]
Women had to wear a veil covering pretty much her whole
7
body 7 so men weren't 8 attracted to them. Marjane’s [body,]
8
mother was sexually harassed by men and was scared for [weren't → were not]
life. In these books 9 the women that protested for their
9
rights were seen as very heroic . 10 Heroic means that [books,]
you 12're 11 looked at like a leader and aren't afraid to stand
10
out for your 13 kind. Even the men that were against women [heroic . → heroic.]
11
being treated 14 this way would protest. Anoosh [you're → you are]
12
Personal pronoun in formal writing
marjane’s 15 uncle , 16 she saw him as one of her Heros. He 13
Personal pronoun in formal writing
was very kind and kind hearted 17 to her. When marjane 18 14
Passive voice
was a child 19 her parents weren't 20 around as much. Her 15
[marjane's → Marjane's]
16
mom was always protesting, her dad was working, and all [uncle , → uncle,]
17

she had was her maid / nanny 21 who was always their 22 for [kind hearted → kind-hearted]
18
[marjane → Marjane]
her. On the other hand 23 the government saw the protests 19
[child,]
as loud and unhelpful. During the book the protests got 20
[weren't → were not]
21
more and more violent, more and more people were being [maid / nanny → maid/nanny]
22
killed 25. The government 26 also known 27 as the Shaw were [their → there]
23
[hand,]
very demanding and awful the women , 28 children , 29 and 24
Weak adjective: worried
men. The Shaw saw the people being loud and obnoxious.
25
And when 30 they did they would kill and stab. They would Passive voice
26
send them to jail if they wanted to. Marjane's father was [government is or government was]
27
sent 31 to jail throughout her child life. Her mom and dad [known → knew]
28
[women , → women,]
were very worried 24. 29
[children , → children,]
30
[And when → Moreover, when]
Demonstrators are seen as heroic because they aren't 32
31
afraid to stand up for what they believe. Women would go Passive voice
out on protest everyday 33 for a long 34 period of time 35
against the veil. Marjane's mom would go out to protest
everyday 36 to fight for women. In this time and era 37
women in iran 38 were treated horribly. They had to wear a
32
veil that covered up her hair and wore black long 39 clothes [aren't → are not]
33
to no skin would show either. On pages 16-17 in [everyday → every day]
34
persepolis 40 book 1 41 it explained how Marjane wanted to Overused word: long
35
[period of time → period]
go and protest with her mom taji 42, but it's 43 to 44 36
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37
dangerous. She knocked on there bedroom door, 46and 45 [everyday
[era,] → every day]
38

walked in with confidence and anger. [iran → Iran]


39

She said to her parents “i 47 want to come with you [black long → long black]

tomorrow!”
40

Her mom and dad got worried and told her that “you can [persepolis → Persepolis]
41
[1 → one]
participate later on.”
42

Marjane screamed “ PLEASE PLEASE……..” [taji → taxi]


43
[it's → it is]
But her 48 dad carried her down to her bed. 44
[to → too]
“Oh god where are you.” she whelped 49. 45
[door, and]
46
But that 50 night he didn’t 51 show. [door, ]
47

The police that would watch the demonstrate would shoot [ i → I]

a few people each day, or take to jail. Marjane’s mom


didn’t 52 want her little girl getting shot or sent to juvie.
48

marjane 54's 53 dad would go take 55 pictures of them [But her → However, her]
49

protesting which is illegal. He would take photos to put in Possibly confused word
50

the newspaper. That was his job though so he had to do [But that → However, that]
51
[didn't → did not]
it.one 56 time marjane’s 57 mother was in the newspaper so
she died her hair so people would notice her.
52
[didn't → did not]
53

The demonstrators were also known as loud and loud [marjane's → Maryjane's]
54
[marjane → Marjane]
unhelpful. The people that believed in women wearing the 55
[go take → take]
veil which is mainly the men and government. The
government would shoot and kill protesters and wouldn’t
56

care who. For example on pages 31 and 32 book 58 1, [one → One]


57
[marjane's → Marjane's]
people carried a man killed by the army out of the hospital
to have a ceremony in the cemetery. This women 59 had 60
a husband that died of cancer and was yelling at them to
stop. They were unhelpful because in book 1 of
persepolis 62 61 pages 75- 76 the government decided that
women were 63 full veils. One day of protesting the
government was hitting and beating women. Marjane
experienced violence for the first time. A woman got
58

stabbed in the leg 64 and that was the last demonstration the [book → books]

went to 65. The government wanted all of the protesting to


stop, so they thought by making this decision the women
59

would quit protesting. Women weren’t 66 allowed to show [This women → This woman]
60
[women had → women had]
skin except there face, mainly hair because men are
61

attracted to women’s hair if it looks good. The [of persepolis → of persepolis]


62
[persepolis → Persepolis]
government’s rules changed over time by even what the 63
[were → be]
men had to wear.
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in 67 conclusion, Persepolis books one and two have heroic 64


[leg,]
people and awful governments. Marjane was a very little 68 65
Preposition at the end of a sentence
girl when she was experiencing these things that a 13 years
old girl would be learning here. She was very determined
to go out and protest with her mom and dad. But the 69 66
[weren't → were not]
world outside was too dangerous because of the Shaw.
When marjane 70 grew up 71 her parents started to realize
that they need to be her hero and not just some person from
a book. Or a 72 close relative that they don't 73 see very often
because they they 75 74're 76 in jail. But when 77 she started
making bad decisions and her life went downhill she 67
[in → In]
realized that she need 78 to stop and think about family and
not drugs. Marjane was a very bright girl and had ups and 68
Weak adjective: little
downs in her life but always pushed through it.

69
[But the → However, the]
70
[marjane → Marjane]
71
[up,]

72
[Or a → Alternatively, a]
73
[don't → do not]
74
[they they]
75
Duplicate pronouns
76
[they're → they are]
77
[But when → However, when]
78
[need → needs]