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Descriptive Essay
October 24
Nightly Sweat
The torn edges of my backpack call to me in a soft, yet serious whisper. As my hands
firmly grasp its aged straps, focus begins to placate my body. Energy courses through determined
veins as I trek to the distant field ahead. At six, the sky has only just begun to fall victim to
darkness. The chill effervesces from the sky, swallowing me whole. Sore muscles from the
previous training are the equivalent of wet noodles. Each step taken towards the destination
shakes my body like an earthquake. Approaching the start of the fields, elation joined the energy
in my bloodstream. The stench of hard work burrows its way into the depths of my flared
nostrils. I knew I was close now. Ambling past the tenacity of youth, observing their drive fills
my lungs with breath. This is the place where the passion of football dug its tendrils into my
naive heart. These measly soccer fields are my home. Commented [1]: terrific intro.
Pack in hand, my arduous travels have come to an end. As I reach the practice turf, my mind
locks in on purpose. There is a job to be done. I drag the zipper to acquire my black, patent
leather adidas cleats. As I carefully slide them onto my feet, I notice the immediate influx of
teammates here to reach the same goal - sweat. I bounce around to activate each pained muscle,
preparing for the session ahead. The surface below is mainly an undeniable green, yet
intermittently there lay pockets of unknown gravel bits. Suddenly the fibers within my built legs
feel like they are tearing at the seams. A hole in the uneven field grips my foot with contempt,
angering every ounce of my limb. Now one with the ground, my delicate hands push me from
Through passing with one another invisible patterns are created. As each touch caresses the
football, masterpieces are made. Perfection is quite literally at the foot of the beholder. These
husky players morph into carbon copies of Dega’s dancers. The movement of the team is candid,
yet choreographed. The studs that line our cleats effectively plow over what is left of the natural
turf. The barren landscape is home to a unique type of farmer. The human foot is a tool like no
other. Countless bones form the necessary equipment to successfully kick. These feet don’t care
where the are, these feet do their duty. Feet are inherently reliable, for their loyalty never wavers.
Practice continues as the sky darkens to a depth of black never seen. Cranking, clashing, and
clanging turn on a rickety portable light fixture to enable us to continue our work deep into night.
Those seemingly sweet white lights began to interrogate me, as their haze made my vision trip. It
became impossible to discern shadows from an incoming rocket of a shot. The glow from above
distorts all coherent vision. The familiar landscape is a complete blur. I am not the only one
struggling, as unforced errors plague my nationally ranked team. The darkness is overwhelming,
yet we fight through the obscurity. The concentration is at its peak, for that is the only way to
feel our way through the gloom. Sweat glistens from the forehead of each player, mimicking a
finely cut diamond. The uncertainty of night didn’t deter the goal that was set. The potency of
challenge never overcomes my will to sweat. The vigor of this unwavering drive is unmatched.
As practice concluded and I trudge off to my bag, I am accomplished. I yank each cleat from my
stinging feet, and promptly start back toward my car. Nights like these grow an athlete into a
champion. The consistency of steered sweat is imperative to the game that dictates my life. Commented [2]: Great phrasing.
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