EXPOSITORY ESSAY

ALEJANDRO MATIZ

ANALYST OF ENGLISH

SANDRA OTERO

FONTAN SCHOOL

2017
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1. Go to the following link and create the outline of your essay.

https://www.sbcc.edu/clrc/files/wl/downloads/StructureofaGeneralExpositoryEssay.pdf

OUTLINE

The industrial revolution was an important movement that changed the world.

It brought many machines that are the base of the actual technology, like the railway or the

vapor machine.

The railway was the first machine that worked as a car, or a taxi or a bus, it served to use in

few times the animals.

The vapor machine was the source of energy of the rest of machines, so the function of

other machines depended on the vapor machine.

The industrial revolution made easier the job of all workers. They had the option to not be

tired with the help of machines.

It brought a change in the social sense, because the society passed to be divided in cultural

status.

In the politic sense, the industrial revolution brought an idea where the government pay the

money on raw material, so they were thinking that de industry could save the world and

their country.
In the economic sense, the aspects were negative, taking account that the salaries of

workers suffered an important reduction, and also the investment of the government in this

topic, made an imbalance that generated the complaints of people.

The industrial revolution brought us the advances of technology, that now make many

surprises, that can help us viewing it in a well sense, making easier our job. But it brought

some problems, that were generated by the government that didn´t have the capacity to use

it in a good way, making an imbalance all important senses.

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TRANSFORMATION

1.Based on your outline, create your expository essay and also include all the information

you learned in the previous stages.

The industrial revolution was an important movement, that brought positive and negative

things to our present, not only in the technologic sense, also in the economic and social

sense. Since 1780 the industrial revolution indicated the beginning of a new life, a simple

life, where you can do your work with the help of machines, where you can meet the

innovations of the world, but also some problems in the salary, a society without justice,

because the government, didn´t have the capacity to administrate it, and also the citizens

didn´t have an effective solution. So, in this text we are going to see this movement, the

new machines, the reasons of the social and economic problems, also a specific and an

honest point of view of the great and bad aspects of this revolution.
The industrial revolution was the movement in which machines were created, that help to

make easier the job. It was a movement that brought economic problems, because the

government was making an investment on the raw material, also with the creation of the

machines the salary of the workers, suffer an important reduction. For example, machines

like the Railway and the vapor machine were created, the second one, worked as a source

of energy of all the machines. When the time passed, elements like the petroleum, worked

as source of energy, of new and modern machines. Also, this revolution, was the point of

the beginning in the use of metal and iron, in they achieved the mission, being the base of

doors, or other stronger elements. For me the industrial revolution brought two positive

aspects and two negative aspects. In the positive sense, this revolution helped us to have an

easier work and to achieve it with all that our bosses ask. The other good thing is that it

impulses us to create and innovate new things, developing our minds to create things that

help the world. The two negative aspects are the next: The reduction of the salaries of the

workers affected in a bad way the life of people, having few resources to live with patience.

The other thing was the investment of the government in the industry. It was an important

factor, because it made the imbalance in England, watching a bad social situation, the

economic problems and the complaints of workers being disagree with this revolution.

The reasons which I can support those explanations are the next. In the first point of view, I

can say, that if the industrial revolution didn´t exist, it would not be machines in the

present. The second aspect, is for me, the most logic aspect with the industrial revolution,

because there were people that had the capacity to create the machines, and now, with more

resources, it is easier to create more of them. The other two aspects are based in the history,

and also for a person that can think, those are not going to be good aspects, because anyone,
want to get a small salary, when you have a family and important expenses to do. Also,

when you want to get a good salary, you depend on the economic situation of the

government, that has the function to decide the salary, you´re going to get in your job.

The significant thing of this evidence is the creativity of people, at the time to make those

machines. If it is true that the negative aspects, doesn´t have as a principal idea, this thing is

the root, of all facts that happened.

So, with those ideas we can summarize this part relating the last three paragraphs. All facts

that brought the industrial revolution, make us analyze the positive and negative aspects,

and those aspects make us look for the principal ideal.

As a conclusion, we can say that the industrial revolutions, not only brought us the

machines, it also generated problems in the economic and social sense, and the government

wasn´t intelligent to administrate the industry. With this revolution, we can construct a best

innovation, also having machines, that can make other machines, also if we are intelligent,

we can use them in a productive way, to develop the world.

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