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ALEJANDRO MATIZ
ANALYST OF ENGLISH
SANDRA OTERO
FONTAN SCHOOL
2017
SKILL DEVELOPMENT
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OUTLINE
The industrial revolution was an important movement that changed the world.
It brought many machines that are the base of the actual technology, like the railway or the
vapor machine.
The railway was the first machine that worked as a car, or a taxi or a bus, it served to use in
The vapor machine was the source of energy of the rest of machines, so the function of
The industrial revolution made easier the job of all workers. They had the option to not be
It brought a change in the social sense, because the society passed to be divided in cultural
status.
In the politic sense, the industrial revolution brought an idea where the government pay the
money on raw material, so they were thinking that de industry could save the world and
their country.
In the economic sense, the aspects were negative, taking account that the salaries of
workers suffered an important reduction, and also the investment of the government in this
The industrial revolution brought us the advances of technology, that now make many
surprises, that can help us viewing it in a well sense, making easier our job. But it brought
some problems, that were generated by the government that didn´t have the capacity to use
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1.Based on your outline, create your expository essay and also include all the information
The industrial revolution was an important movement, that brought positive and negative
things to our present, not only in the technologic sense, also in the economic and social
sense. Since 1780 the industrial revolution indicated the beginning of a new life, a simple
life, where you can do your work with the help of machines, where you can meet the
innovations of the world, but also some problems in the salary, a society without justice,
because the government, didn´t have the capacity to administrate it, and also the citizens
didn´t have an effective solution. So, in this text we are going to see this movement, the
new machines, the reasons of the social and economic problems, also a specific and an
honest point of view of the great and bad aspects of this revolution.
The industrial revolution was the movement in which machines were created, that help to
make easier the job. It was a movement that brought economic problems, because the
government was making an investment on the raw material, also with the creation of the
machines the salary of the workers, suffer an important reduction. For example, machines
like the Railway and the vapor machine were created, the second one, worked as a source
of energy of all the machines. When the time passed, elements like the petroleum, worked
as source of energy, of new and modern machines. Also, this revolution, was the point of
the beginning in the use of metal and iron, in they achieved the mission, being the base of
doors, or other stronger elements. For me the industrial revolution brought two positive
aspects and two negative aspects. In the positive sense, this revolution helped us to have an
easier work and to achieve it with all that our bosses ask. The other good thing is that it
impulses us to create and innovate new things, developing our minds to create things that
help the world. The two negative aspects are the next: The reduction of the salaries of the
workers affected in a bad way the life of people, having few resources to live with patience.
The other thing was the investment of the government in the industry. It was an important
factor, because it made the imbalance in England, watching a bad social situation, the
economic problems and the complaints of workers being disagree with this revolution.
The reasons which I can support those explanations are the next. In the first point of view, I
can say, that if the industrial revolution didn´t exist, it would not be machines in the
present. The second aspect, is for me, the most logic aspect with the industrial revolution,
because there were people that had the capacity to create the machines, and now, with more
resources, it is easier to create more of them. The other two aspects are based in the history,
and also for a person that can think, those are not going to be good aspects, because anyone,
want to get a small salary, when you have a family and important expenses to do. Also,
when you want to get a good salary, you depend on the economic situation of the
government, that has the function to decide the salary, you´re going to get in your job.
The significant thing of this evidence is the creativity of people, at the time to make those
machines. If it is true that the negative aspects, doesn´t have as a principal idea, this thing is
So, with those ideas we can summarize this part relating the last three paragraphs. All facts
that brought the industrial revolution, make us analyze the positive and negative aspects,
As a conclusion, we can say that the industrial revolutions, not only brought us the
machines, it also generated problems in the economic and social sense, and the government
wasn´t intelligent to administrate the industry. With this revolution, we can construct a best
innovation, also having machines, that can make other machines, also if we are intelligent,
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