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LESSON 3
This week we will look at writing a formal letter, another popular question for directed
writing.Question 1
Your class is unhappy with your school canteen. As the monitor of your class, you have been
asked to write to your principal, to complain about the following:
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food left uncovered
attract many flies
food served is stale
food too expensive
oily plates and cups
rude workers
workers not properly attired
dustbins not cleared daily
same menu daily
In your letter, you would also like to offer three suggestions from your classmates:
stringent checks
cheaper food
serve a variety of food
(35 marks)Look at the model answer below to revise the format of a formal letter and see
how the points are elaborated.
The Class Monitor,
Form 5 Murni,
SMK Dato’ Kurnia,
34000 Taiping,
Perak.
Dear Sir,
On behalf of the students of 5 Murni, I would like to lodge a complaint about the school canteen.
2. First and foremost, the food served is not covered and many flies can be seen hovering over the
food. This may lead to food poisoning. Moreover, the canteen also serves stale food. The ‘nasi lemak’ turns
bad by the time the upper forms have their recess. Last week, a few of us had diarrhoea after consuming
food from the canteen.
3. Apart from that, the food is also too expensive. A small plate of fried mee costs RM1.50 and many
poor students cannot afford it. Besides that, the canteen serves the same menu daily. The students are
bored with fried rice and fried mee every day.
4. Another complaint is that the cups and plates are oily and not washed properly. The workers are also
not appropriately attired although they have been told to wear aprons and caps. Moreover, these workers
are rude to students. They shout at us and use foul language whenever they get angry. They also do not
clear the dustbins and rubbish daily. This is very unhygienic. As a result, there is a foul stench whenever
we eat in the canteen.
5. Thus, we would like to suggest that the school authorities make stringent checks on the canteen daily
or weekly. They should also ensure that the canteen serves a variety of food at a reasonable price.
6. We would like to appeal to your sense of fairness and hope prompt action will be taken regarding
these matters.
Yours faithfully,
LailyRosli lllll
(LAILY BT ROSLI)
5 Murni
Note how the points given are arranged into paragraphs and elaborated where needed.
The last paragraph states the action you want taken. This week, I would also like to focus on the elaboration
and expansion of notes.
I also want to draw your attention to the structures I used in the model answer.
Notice how I used First and foremost, Moreover, Apart from that, Besides that, Another complaint
is and so on. These are transitional words and phrases which help to make the essay flow smoothly and to
lead the reader from one point to another.
You can use many other transitional words and phrases to make your essay more cohesive.
To add to what you have just said: also, similarly, furthermore, in addition, then, moreover, in other
words, in the same way
To use a specific example to support what you have said: For example, especially, for instance, to
illustrate, as an illustration, such as
To show sequence: First and foremost, first, The second advantage is, Next, Another reason is, Lastly,
Finally
To indicate that you are about to contrast what has just been said: but, on the other hand, yet,
nevertheless, on the contrary, however
To indicate a conclusion: In conclusion, consequently, thus, therefore, in summary, therefore, as a result
Question:
A group of Form Five students from your school’s Environment Club would like to go on a camping trip. As
the secretary of the club, you have been asked to write a letter to a resort to seek permission to camp at a
nearby waterfall. Your letter should include the following points:
state the purpose of your letter
introduce your club
teachers who will be accompanying the students
number of students
the date and duration of your camp
activities to be carried out – boating, jungle trekking, nature study
transportation
promise to clear the rubbish
will be responsible for first-aid and other safety precautions
Remember to set out the letter correctly and to use all the points given.
Your plan may look roughly like this:
Paragraph 1 : State the purpose of the letter
Introduce your club
Paragraph 2 : State the number of students and teachers
going on the trip State the duration (how long you will
be staying) and the dates
Paragraph 3 : Describe the activities
Paragraph 4 : Describe the travelling arrangements and
include the promise to
clear the rubbish.
Add in the point about
first-aid and so on.
How is your journal getting on? Many students have e-mailed me about their journals and I am very
encouraged by your enthusiasm. Use your creativity and decorate your journals too. Do send me your
journals and maybe, if space permits, I will publish them. Here are the prompts for your journal this week.
Keep writing and stay cool.
Jenny Tan is a teacher of English and published author of several revision books.
Word choices :
not appropriately stale food to lodge a complaint daily or weekly bored with
attired
food poisoning Another complaint is faithfully unhygienic reasonable
cannot afford it behalf of serves the same First and foremost foul language
properly to suggest Dear ensure that the canteen Apart from that
hovering over the prompt action consuming food from As a result students
food the canteen
Dear Sir,
On behalf of the students of 5 Murni, I would like to lodge a complaint about the school canteen.
2. First and foremost, the food served is not covered and many flies can be seen hovering over the
food. This may lead to food poisoning. Moreover, the canteen also serves stale food. The ‘nasi lemak’ turns
bad by the time the upper forms have their recess. Last week, a few of us had diarrhoea after consuming
food from the canteen.
3. Apart from that, the food is also too expensive. A small plate of fried mee costs RM1.50 and many
poor students cannot afford it. Besides that, the canteen serves the same menu daily. The students are
bored with fried rice and fried mee every day.
4. Another complaint is that the cups and plates are oily and not washed properly. The workers are also
not appropriately attired although they have been told to wear aprons and caps. Moreover, these workers
are rude to students. They shout at us and use foul language whenever they get angry. They also do not
clear the dustbins and rubbish daily. This is very unhygienic. As a result, there is a foul stench whenever
we eat in the canteen.
5. Thus, we would like to suggest that the school authorities make stringent checks on the canteen daily
or weekly. They should also ensure that the canteen serves a variety of food at a reasonable price.
6. We would like to appeal to your sense of fairness and hope prompt action will be taken regarding
these matters.
Yours faithfully,
LailyRosli lllll
(LAILY BT ROSLI)