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Instructions:
1. Read/watch through the profile quickly to form your general reaction. Complete the “General
Reaction” box in the worksheet below.
2. Read/watch through the profile again, this time more carefully. Make note of any specific
paragraphs/sentences/sections that you think could be improved.
3. Complete the rest of the worksheet. Be sure to be detailed and specific. Refer to specific
paragraphs/sentences/timestamps from the profile whenever possible.
a. Point out strengths as well as areas for improvement.
b. Make sure you focus your comments on larger issues, like structure, clarity, context and
background, and details and dialogue.
c. Be specific and offer suggestions for improvement.
i. Try asking questions.
ii. If you point out a problem, offer a suggestion.
4. Submit your worksheets to D2L and share with the author on Google Drive. You should
complete one worksheet for each of your group members (a total of two).
a. If you are doing the extra credit, you will have to fill out three more of these for three
other students. Consider using Slack and/or the classlist to find people who want extra
feedback. You will have to turn it into the “Additional Labor Extra Credit Due 11.15 Must
Also Share With Authors.” These will be due at midnight so the authors have Friday to
incorporate your feedback.
INTRODUCTION & CONCLUSION: Did the intro ● In the introduction you are very clear
make you want to keep going? Has the author about what is/was the issue in your
avoided sounding like a report or a lecture? Does community.
the conclusion wrap up the profile and reinforce ● I like that you began with a direct
the significance? question to the audience.
● I think it will be helpful to describe your
community first (BCBG) and then write
about the issue and use this as a thesis.
DESIGN: What visual elements (e.g. photographs, ● You could add some images.
charts, tables, pictures, etc.) has the writer used ● For example, when you wrote about the
most effectively? Are all images used high prices or the clearance rack, you can
purposefully? Point out specific areas in the include an image of customers on that
profile that could benefit from more visuals. area. (I think you can get these images
from google)
RESEARCH: How has the author utilized their ● I really like how you incorporate your
interviews and observations? Is their research research to explain the bankruptcy issue
integrated into the profile effectively and in your community.
purposefully? Has the author used a mix of ● The relation between your research,
summaries, paraphrases, and quotations? What observation and interviews is really good!
insights into the community do the observations ● You were very clear and descriptive while
and interviews provide? writing about your observation. (“show
not just tell”)
SUGGESTIONS: Offer the writer at least two ● Instead of writing the question and
specific suggestions to help him or her improve answer from the interview, you could use
the profile. Think of questions you had when some quotes to support your arguments.
reading. Take the time to provide thoughtful ● You could use two or three columns to
thorough feedback. make it look more like a magazine article.
● I’m not confident about giving you
specific grammar’s advices but I think you
can review it later.
● Also, check the use of commas in your
writing.
● Find some synonyms for those words that
you repeated in the text (decided) you
can use determine, choose, conclude,
elect, select…