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Style O
5 compound, and compound-complex sentences
4 Did not use questions in writing
Did not include “baby words” (get, getting, got, go, going, gone, put,
4 putting, puts, said, stuff, things,
2 Essay was written in the present tense
Quotes
5 Quotes were integrated effectively into student’s own writing O
Punctuation
Commas were used accurately in conjunction with FANBOYS,
5 AWHITEBUSes and non-restrictive phrases
Appropriately used apostrophes to show possession and avoided them to
4 indicate number
4 Commas are used after introductory and around non-restrictive phrases
4 Did not include any homophone errors
4 Spelled out all words and numbers necessary
4 Did not use contractions in writing (didn’t, can’t, weren’t)
Usage
4 Verb tenses were in agreement
4 There were no subject-verb agreement errors
3 There were no pronoun-antecedent agreement errors
4 Appropriate use of capital letters was demonstrated
_____ / 80 Section Score
See appendix J for instructions on how to convert your raw score to a traditional grade
according to a holistic ELA rubric.
1. INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH
A general statement, or claim, if you are using the Argumentation model, is a thematic, widely accepted
statement on your topic.
For example, if you are writing about baseball, a general statement may be
If you are writing about Harry Potter, you may start an essay with the famous saying,
Notice that no specific references to the players, teams, characters, etc are made in these sentences.
When you think about it, the same general statements can be used to start off a number of different
essays, whether they’re about the Yankees, the Mets, Harry Potter or The Clique.
By high school, teachers will probably dissuade you from using what they call clichés like the last one,
but for now, poignant statements like that may help you get a handle on your writing topic.
Your essay should start with one of these statements, which should be easily connected to your topic and
your main thesis or controlling idea. For example, if you’re writing about how Harry becomes a more
powerful wizard in the Potter series because he needs to in order to survive, your topic may be
something about change, dynamic characters, or overcoming adversity. Your general statement can be
Necessity is the mother of invention.
Because he needs them in order to survive, Harry develops the skills of a great wizard
throughout his years at Hogwarts.
Note that the thesis statement above (1) is opinionated, (2) is connected to the general statement, and (3)
falls under the identified topic. An even more opinionated version may be,
If Voldemort were not constantly trying to destroy Harry, he would probably never have
turned into the great wizard his “destiny” foretold.
Remember, the more opinionated you are, the more interesting your essay will probably be. Don’t worry
too much about being “wrong” at this stage of the game.
The second sentence in your introduction paragraph doesn’t say anything incredible, but it serves an
important purpose. In a literary essay, you absolutely must identify the genre, author and work of
literature about which you are writing. Keep your “transition sentence” here as simple as possible
because most of it (the title, author and genre) is already written for you. The sentence should be a short
bridge from your general statement towards the more specific points you will identify in your theses.
If your general statement, for example, is
you can add the title, author and genre to the statement by writing
In the novel, Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire, it’s necessity that forces Harry to discover
skills he never knew he had as a wizard.
Your introduction paragraph has an important job in your essay. Without saying, “In this essay I will,” it
has to tell the reader not only what you seek to prove in your paper, but how you intend to prove it. If,
for example, you are writing an essay to prove that
Because they have a superior offense and defense, the Yankees will win the pennant this
year.
your introduction paragraph should establish that the body of your essay will spend at least one
paragraph to prove each, that the team’s offense is superior, and its defense is as well. Your mini-
theses/topic sentences tell readers of your essay what you will prove in each paragraph using evidence.
You may, for example write one paragraph to prove that
Notice that this paragraph thesis supports the purpose for the essay, but is still broad enough that it,
itself, can be supported with several examples and details. Your second paragraph may aim to prove that
The Yankees’ on-base percentage makes it impossible for their competitors to match their
scoring power.
Remember, if they’re theses, they need to be opinionated statements, so avoid the temptation of saying
that a paragraph will be “about” their pitching or hitting, which sets you up for a summary. As with your
main thesis, the more opinionated you can be, the better.
An essay without a thesis statement is like a car without wheels: it may look pretty in the driveway, but
it won’t get you anywhere. Remember that all literary essays have theses they seek to prove. Without a
thesis, you are probably writing a book summary. Even with a thesis it can often be difficult to avoid the
temptation of telling your reader “what happens” in the story.
Coming up with a thesis is a struggle for young writers, but remember you can use the following three
methods to get started;
(1) The Essential Question: Begin your brainstorming by simply answering the question that
defines your essay assignment. If, for example, you are asked the question, “How does
conflict shape one’s identity?” you can start by answering the question as a simple,
general statement:
The problems characters face in literature force them to learn new things
about themselves.
The next step would be to simply apply your general statement to your assigned work of
literature by making it more specific:
The challenges Harry faces each year he returns to Hogwart’s unlock his
potential as a wizard by forcing him to develop the courage and wisdom of
his predecessors.
(2) The Elements Connection: Start by brainstorming what you know about the elements of
the story you have read. Think about the conflicts, characters, settings, plot elements and
themes or motifs. Then look for any relationships that may exist between or among them.
If, for example, you were writing about Sandra Cisneros’ The House on Mango Street,
you may identify the theme of the oppression of women. Knowing that the novel takes
place in an urban, high-minority area during the 1950s, you may write an essay to prove
that
The women on Mango Street are victims of their time, place and people.
(3) The Argumentation Model: Use the pre-AP strategy of argumentation to develop a thesis
by first, identifying an important topic (or motif) in your text. If you were writing about
The Lord of the Rings, for example, you may identify friendship as an important topic.
The second step is to create a general statement or claim about the topic (cf. I.1), like
A friend is someone who stands beside you through the hardest of times.
Finally, you would apply your general statement to your assigned work of literature by
making it more specific, as you would using the Essential Question method:
If Frodo did not have the support of the Fellowship, the battle for Middle-
Earth would surely be lost.
*Visit the Appendix A for more thesis statement dos and don’ts .
Of course, you must make sure that your writing is on task. Read any directions for the essay provided
very carefully and be sure to address every aspect, paying particularly close attention to anything
bulleted. Before you begin writing, you may want to identify the operative words in the directions,
which often identify themes, literary techniques, or strategies assigned to your writing.
2. BODY PARAGRAPHS
While it may sound repetitive, you should restate the paragraph theses/topic sentences you identified in
your introduction paragraph at the top of their respective body paragraphs. Again, without saying, “In
this essay I will…” appropriately placed topic sentences tell the reader not only what to expect, but
when to expect it. They establish a purpose for each body paragraph before you begin writing, and if you
hold true to that purpose, your essay will be cohesive and, with any luck, avoid slipping into mere
summary.
TIP! After you write your topic sentence at the top of your body paragraph, take note of the operative
words in your writing. For example, does your sentence address “David’s hardships…” in A Child
Called It? If so, be sure to sprinkle those words throughout your body paragraph. The effect created is
like an invisible thread that holds your paragraph together. If your topic sentence focuses on hardships,
and the word, hardships (or its synonyms), appears throughout your paragraph, you stand a good chance
of actually maintaining focus.
Remember that a literary essay seeks to prove a point you are making about a piece of literature.
Without making some specific references to the literature, itself, you stand little chance of doing that
effectively. Every one of these details should be developed sufficiently and connected back to your
purpose for writing.
In a literary essay, it is never enough to drop hints about what you want to say and forget to actually say
it. Compare, for example the details below for a sample essay on The House on Mango Street.
Although there are many women Esperanza should avoid on Mango Street, there are still
those like Aunt Lupe who support her.
Although there are many women Esperanza should avoid on Mango Street, there are still
those like Aunt Lupe who remind her that she “must keep writing” because it will “set
[her] free.”
Of course, every quote or specific reference to the text you make must be cited according to the method
outlined in §5.2.2.
2.4 Clearly explained how the quotes support the point being made.
Continuing with the example from §2.4, it is important to do more with quotes than merely drop them
into your essay. Each one should be used very carefully and with a specific purpose in mind, like
different colors on a painter’s palette. If you write,
Although there are many women Esperanza should avoid on Mango Street, there are still
those like Aunt Lupe who remind her that she “must keep writing” because it will “set
[her] free,”
you should continue to explain the quotes you’ve selected and how they support your point:
Aunt Lupe’s advice to Esperanza, though perhaps offered to her when she was too young,
establishes the importance of education, especially on Mango Street where many women
look only to the men in their lives as a means to make things better. Lupe realizes
Esperanza’s potential, and she urges her to continue to learn and express herself…
Of course, it’s much easier to skip this step, which is why most students do, especially on a timed essay,
but without a thorough explanation, a good quote from the text may as well be replaced with a grocery
list.
Remember to frequently tie the details in your writing back to your purpose. Using variations of the
word because frequently throughout your body paragraphs is a good way to ensure that you are actually
putting your details to good use, like in this sentence that explains the quote above:
Because she realizes Esperanza’s potential at an early age and uses what little strength
she has to encourage her, Aunt Lupe clearly is a woman Esperanza could learn
something positive from.
Despite the many negative influences who lived in Esperanza’s neighborhood, there were
still many women she could look up to.
2.6 Included a transition to the next paragraph or connection to the theses at the end of the
paragraph.
After working so hard to make a strong argument in your essay, don’t just skydive out of your first body
paragraph. Take a second to revisit a thesis, like outlined in §2.5, or make a gradual transition into your
next idea.
Continuing with The House on Mango Street, you can easily transition from a paragraph about positive
influences in the neighborhood to one on negative influences:
Despite the positive examples set by…, Esperanza was still surrounded by people she
should not and could not have followed.
3. DRAWING OUT A CONCLUSION
Any details you intend to use to prove your argument should appear in your body paragraphs. The
conclusion paragraph is where you pull together your argument in a clear and cohesive closing
statement. Any new information from the text introduced here would actually hurt the clarity of your
argument even if you think its presence may help at the last minute.
During your closing statement, you should restate, preferably in new wording, your original idea. After
having used the writing process to further explore the literature, and more specifically, your original
insights into it, you should see things from a slightly different perspective.
The conclusion paragraph really asks you to share what you have learned from your writing experience.
It helps to read through your entire essay and ask yourself that question before writing the conclusion
paragraph.
4. C ONVEYING M EANING AND U NDERSTANDING
There’s a difference between being able to list what happens in a story and really understanding it.
While anyone can watch a series of events unfold, not everyone is equally equipped to make meaning of
them. It’s your ability to make an original insight into what you read that conveys your understanding of
a text. We already know that it’s not an essay without a point.
In addition to having a point you seek to prove in your essay, it’s almost equally important that your
point be a clear and easily communicated one. For now, avoid unnecessarily complicated wording and
the desire to write about anything you don’t fully understand. If you worry that your point is too
complicated, show it to a friend. If s/he asks you to explain what you mean and you can’t do so clearly
enough for him/her to understand, fix it or toss it. For most thesis statements, short and sweet is best.
*Visit the Appendix A for more thesis statement dos and don’ts .
4.2 The essay’s purpose was aligned to the task. (Cf. §1.5)
For most standardized assessments, the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow is reserved for students
who show graders something others can not. If you have a powerful command of the English language
you can reach that prize. The other path to it means showing your audience your creativity and ability to
mobilize ideas.
The clarity – or better, poignancy – of your thesis statement is key. You’ll want one that is
thoughtful and unique in its insight, but you’ll need to avoid the pitfall of writing something
that’s so overambitious that it doesn’t make sense. When something is poignant, it demonstrates
great meaning insight in as few words as possible.
Simply put, if the details you’re including in your essay don’t support your arguments, don’t use
them.
WRITING MECHANICS AND STYLE
5.1 STYLE
5.1.1 Did not refer to self or speak directly to the reader in the essay (does not write in the first
or second person point of view).
Unless you are writing a personal essay, there is no reason to refer to yourself in your essay
(especially if you are considering saying something like “In this essay I…” or “In my
opinion…”). Just talk about the text, as clearly and assertively as possible. Avoid any references
to your opinion, which would make your writing weak and “fuzzy.” Instead, act as if you are the
foremost authority on your subject and there is absolutely no chance that you could be wrong.
Write as if you are a dictionary.
5.1.2 Sentences begin in a variety of ways (not just with the subject).
Sentence variety makes your essay more enjoyable and easier to read. If you start every sentence
with the subject, your writing will sound like a shopping list or children’s book. Instead of…
try…
5.1.3 Sentence structure is varied and includes a combination of simple, complex, compound, and
compound-complex sentences.
Again, sentence variety makes writing more interesting and, believe it or not, effective and
mature. Try the methods listed above to combine sentences and vary their basic order and
structure, but make sure you know where the commas belong! Other sentence variety options
you’ll learn this year include parallel, inverted, balanced and loose. A well-written essay already
uses most of them.
If the audience reading your essay cannot answer them, why would you ask questions? Questions
should especially be avoided in your introduction where young writers still use them as a hook to
start their essays.
Most non-specific words students use in their writing are there as variables, meant to take the
place of the more appropriate, yet more difficult to recall (or unknown) variation.
See Appendix B for to find words more suitable to your writing needs.
When Harry would return to school, he would always wish he had an easier year
than ones passed.
try
When Harry returns to school, he wishes for an easier year than ones passed.
5.2 QUOTES
It’s a giant step in the right direction when students start using quotes in their writing. It’s a great
leap when you can actually integrate them into your writing so that reading them is not like
running into a brick wall.
See Appendix C for strategies on how to integrate quotes into your writing more effectively.
Again, it’s a giant step in the right direction if you are using quotes in your writing. If, however,
you use someone else’s words in your writing without giving him or her credit for them, that’s
called plagiarism. After each quote, you need to include a citation in one of the two formats
below:
In each of the examples above, notice that the internal citation goes outside the quotes and the
period ending the sentence goes after that. In the first example, you have to include the author’s
name because it is not already included in the sentence. In the second example, you only need to
include the page number because you’ve already identified the author.
5.3 PUNCTUATION
A run-on sentence occurs when two or more sentences are incorrectly written as a single
sentence. For example:
Glaciers are large masses of moving snow and ice they created may of the lakes in the
United States.
Notice there is no punctuation between the two sentences when there should be.
Glaciers are large masses of moving snow and ice, they created many of the lakes in the
United States.
This example has a punctuation mark, but only a comma, which creates a comma splice run-on
(think of the comma as a terrible scar down the middle of your sentence’s face).
Glaciers are large masses of moving snow and ice. They created many of the lakes in the
United States.
1. Create two separate sentences by adding end punctuation and a capital letter.
2. Use a coordinating conjunction (FANBOYS) preceded by a comma to join the
sentences.
3. Use a semicolon to join two closely related sentences.
4. Change one sentence into a subordinate clause or phrase, adding or changing words and
punctuation as needed.
See Appendix D for more on FANBOYS or Appendix E for more information on subordinate
clauses.
5.3.2 Commas were used accurately in conjunction with FANBOYS, AWHITEBUSes and non-
restrictive phrases.
A compound sentence combines two or more independent clauses with a comma and a
FANBOYS. For example:
The two sentences above are independent clauses because they have both subjects and
actions/predicates. You can combine the two using a comma and a FANBOYS as follows:
The Amazon River is the longest river in South America, but The Nile is the world’s
longest river.
A complex sentence combines one independent clause with one dependent clause and a
subordinating conjunction (AWHITEBUS). Remember, an independent clause can stand on its
own as a complete sentence because it has both its subject and its action. A dependent clause,
however, can not stand on its own as a complete sentence because it is missing one or both of
those things. For example:
I bought popcorn.
Notice that when your sentence begins with an AWHITEBUS, you need to place a comma
between the two clauses. When the AWHITEBUS is in the middle of the sentence, however, you
absolutely should not.
A nonrestrictive phrase is a phrase that is not necessary to the basic meaning of the sentence,
and it should always be surrounded by commas. For example, in the sentence
The phrase has no pets at home is not necessary in completing the sentence. Mr. Haase is
considering buying a pet, would be complete without the extra descriptor. Think of it this way, if
the phrase you’re using adds a description like you could picture in parentheses, make sure you
set it off by commas.
5.3.3 Appropriately used apostrophes to show possession and avoided them to indicate number.
Except for special words and contractions, adding a ‘s to the end of a noun or pronoun shows
possession. The simplest way to think of adding apostrophes to plural words is that the
possession is added to everything in front of an apostrophe. For example
Remember to be careful with special words like its, which does not use an apostrophe to show
possession. It’s is actually a contraction of it is.
5.3.4 Commas are used after introductory and around non-restrictive phrases.
Use a comma to separate an adverb clause or a long phrase from the independent clause that
follows it. For example,
5.4 USAGE
Homophones are words the sound alike but are spelled differently. Watch out for these common
homophone errors:
See Appendix F for a list of commonly misused homophones.
Remember that for formal writing, you must spell out everything, including words like and and
any numbers, cardinal (one, two, three) or ordinal numbers (first, second, third, etc.).
For formal writing, not only must you spell out words frequently abbreviated or written
numerically, but you should also avoid using contractions, which are informal. Instead of words
like didn’t and can’t, for example, you should write did not and can not.
Use verbs in the same tense to describe events that occur at the same time.
CONSISTENT: Thousands of new presidential dollar coins are flawed. They lack
one letter.
Subjects and verbs must agree in number whether singular or plural. Irregular verbs and
indefinite pronouns can often cause errors in agreement, especially if you write quickly or don’t
proofread. Remember that most indefinite pronouns like neither, nobody, either, someone, etc.
actually require that you use a singular verb form. For example:
True, it sounds strange, but in the sentence above, the subject is not James and Mark; it is either
or one of them, which means you have to use the verb is (singular) as opposed to are (plural).
See Appendix G for a list of irregular verbs and Appendix H for a list of indefinite pronouns.
Pronouns are words that take the place of one or more nouns or pronouns, like he, she, it they,
them, we, you, us, etc. The word or phrase that a pronoun replaces is called its antecedent.
A pronoun must agree with its antecedent in number, gender, and person. For example
While the example above seems pretty easy, indefinite pronouns can complicate things a little.
Take a look at the following sentence, for example:
Either James or Mark left his textbook in English yesterday.
It seems strange to see two names in the subject of a sentence and the pronoun his (singular), but
because the indefinite pronoun, Either, is the real subject, and it always takes a singular form, we
have to use the word his as opposed to their. After all, only one of the boys left his textbook
behind anyway.
Please remember that capital letters are not a fashion statement. You cannot leave the first letter
of an author’s name lowercase because you like the way that letter looks in your handwriting, or
you have something against its bigger counterpart.
A good tentative thesis will help you focus your search for information. But don't
rush! You must do a lot of background reading before you know enough about a
subject to identify key or essential questions. You may not know how you stand
on an issue until you have examined the evidence. You will likely begin your
research with a working, preliminary or tentative thesis which you will continue to
refine until you are certain of where the evidence leads.
The thesis statement is typically located at the end of your opening paragraph.
(The opening paragraph serves to set the context for the thesis.)
Remember, your reader will be looking for your thesis. Make it clear, strong, and
easy to find.
• He went into town to buy groceries, to visit his friends, and to go to the bookstore.
Balanced
Sentences:
A
balanced
sentence
is
a
sentence
that
uses
parallel
structure
of
roughly
the
same
length
and
importance.
"It was the best of times, it was the worst of times..." (A Tale of Two Cities)
"White
chickens
lay
white
eggs,
and
brown
chickens
lay
brown
eggs;
so
if
white
cows
give
white
milk,
do
brown
cows
give
chocolate
milk?"
Parallel Sentences: Sentences with a a balance of two or more similar words, phrases, or clauses.
Inverted
Sentences:
An
inverted
sentence
is
one
in
which
the
subject
appears
after
the
verb.
This
gives
the
subject
more
emphasis.
• In
the
garden
stand
the
statues.
• On
the
desk
are
red
pens.
Name:
______________________
Date:
____________________
Teacher:
Mr.
Haase
per.
_____
Section:
Projects
and
Assessments
1. What
style
of
sentences
can
you
find?
List
the
number
of
loose,
balanced,
and
parallel
*
sentences.
If
you
have
no
sentences
of
one
of
these
types
in
your
paper,
rewrite
some
sentences
in
that
style.
b. One I added:
d. One I added:
f. One I added:
2. How
long
are
your
sentences?
Count
words
in
the
paper,
count
sentences,
and
divide
to
arrive
at
an
average
length.
Number
of
words
_____
/
Number
of
sentences
_____
=
_____
words/sentence.
3. Find
your
longest
sentence.
It
has
_____
words.
The
sentence
before
it
has
_____
words.
The
sentence
after
it
has
_____
words.
If
that
long
sentence
is
not
either
preceded
or
followed
by
a
short
sentence,
change
one
of
them
to
a
short
sentence.
c. to this one:
4. What
forms
are
your
sentences?
Count
and
identify
them
below.
If
you
do
not
have
variety,
rewrite
some
sentences
to
include
these
sentence
types.
b. One I added:
e. Complex sentences:
f. One I added:
5. Count
the
number
of
to
be
verbs
(is,
am,
are,
was,
were,
be,
being,
been).
Find
three
that
can
better
be
expressed
as
action
verbs
and
rewrite
the
sentences
that
way.
c. to this one:
6. Have
you
inverted
any
sentences?
If
not,
rewrite
one
to
do
so.
The
inverted
sentence
I
(had
/
created)
is:
7. Count
how
many
times
you
use
of:
_____,
in:
_____,
to:
_____,
and
by:
_____.
Aim
to
use
each
word
one
fewer
time.
b. to this one:
8. Find
and
color-‐code
all
of
your
pronouns.
Match
each
with
its
antecedent
by
color-‐coding
that
word
as
well.
Name:
______________________
Date:
____________________
Teacher:
Mr.
Haase
per.
_____
Section:
Student
Toolbox
2.
–ing
word
group
in
the
middle
of
the
sentence:
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family,
sitting
on
the
porch,
watched
the
sun
go
down.
3.
–ing
word
group
at
the
end
of
the
sentence:
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch,
watching
the
sun
go
down.
4.
Adverb
clause
at
the
beginning
of
sentence:
As
the
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch,
they
watched
the
sun
go
down.
5.
Adverb
clause
at
the
end
of
sentence:
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch
in
order
to
watch
the
sun
go
down.
6.
Adjective
immediately
following
noun:
The
family,
quiet
and
close
knit,
sat
on
the
porch,
watching
the
sun
go
down.
7.
Appositive
(actual
word
that
will
serve
as
the
appositive
will
have
to
be
added):
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family,
the
Smiths,
sat
on
the
porch,
watching
the
sun
go
down.
8.
Noun
followed
by
–ing
word
group
(noun
absolute):
The
sun
having
already
gone
down,
the
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch.
Baby Words….
Words which are okay to use in notes, informal discussions, informal
writing, and rough drafts but NOT IN FORMAL WRITING OR A
FINAL DRAFT. Make sure the words below are OUT of any final
piece of writing. Your score will be lowered SIGNIFICANTLY if
found in the assessed paper.
• Get
• Getting
• Got
• Go
• Going
• Gone
• Kids
• Put
• Putting
• Puts
• Said
• Stuff
• Things
• Etc…
Integrating Quotations into Sentences
It’s all about the punctuation!
You should never have a quotation standing alone as a complete
sentence, or, worse yet, as an incomplete sentence, in your writing.
2. Use an introductory or explanatory phrase, but not a complete sentence, separated from the quotation with a
comma. You should use a comma to separate your own words from the quotation when your introductory or
explanatory phrase ends with a verb such as "says," "said," "thinks," "believes," "pondered," "recalls," "questions," and
"asks" (and many more). You should also use a comma when you introduce a quotation with an attribution phrase such
as "According to Mr. Ditch."
3. Make the quotation a part of your own sentence without any punctuation between your own words and the words
you are quoting. Notice that the word "that" is used in examples. When it is used as it is in the example, "that" replaces
the comma which would be necessary without "that" in the sentence. You usually have a choice, then, when you begin a
sentence with a phrase such as "Thoreau says." You either can add a comma after "says," or you can add the word "that"
with no comma.
Jerry Seinfield once said that there are “Four Levels of Comedy: make your friends laugh, make strangers
laugh, get paid to make strangers laugh, and make people talk like you because it's so much fun."
4. Use short quotations--only a few words--as part of your own sentence. When you integrate quotations in this way,
you do not use any special punctuation. Instead, you should punctuate the sentence just as you would if all of the words
were your own.
An Irish saying reminds us that friends that “gossip with you” may also be friends that gossip about you.
Name:
______________________
Date:
____________________
Teacher:
Mr.
Haase
per.
_____
Section:
Student
Toolbox
For
example:
(4)
Before
you
begin
on
a
journey
of
revenge,
dig
two
graves.
-‐-‐Confucius
Sentence:
Revenge is something that never pays off. In tragic plays, most characters who seek
revenge should always begin by “digging two graves.”
(1)You
must
be
the
change
you
wish
to
see
in
the
(1)Nothing
can
bring
you
peace
but
yourself.
world.
-‐-‐Ralph
Waldo
Emerson
-‐-‐Mahatma
Ghandi
(2)That
which
does
not
kill
you
makes
you
stronger.
(2)
Happiness
does
not
depend
on
outward
things,
but
-‐-‐Neitzsche
on
the
way
we
see
them.
-‐-‐Leo
Tolstoy
(3)
Anyone
who
has
never
made
a
mistake
has
never
(3)
A
right
delayed
is
a
right
denied.
tried
anything
new.
-‐-‐Martin
Luther
King,
Jr.
-‐-‐Albert
Einstein
(4)
There's
not
an
American
in
this
country
free
until
(4)
Tis
better
to
have
loved
and
lost
than
never
to
have
every
one
of
us
is
free.
loved
at
all.
-‐-‐Jackie
Robinson
-‐-‐Alfred,
Lord
Tennyson
Coordinating
Conjunctions
F
for
A
and
N
nor
B
but
O
or
Y
yet
S
so
Subordinating
Conjunctions
A
after
although
as
W
where
wherever
when
whenever
while
H
how
I
if
T
than
E
even
though
even
if
B
because
before
U
unless
until
S
since
so
that
Subordinate
Clauses
A
subordinate
clause
does
not
express
a
complete
thought
and
cannot
stand
alone
as
a
sentence.
Either Jason or Lance left his history textbook on the round table in the corner.
George Washington and James Madison signed the constitution, and they became
presidents.
Proper nouns (the names of specific people, places, organizations, and sometimes
things)
aunts.
The names of God, specific deities, religious figures, and holy books
Directions that are names (North, South, East, and West when used as sections of
the country, but not as compass directions)
The days of the week, the months of the year, and holidays (but not the seasons used
generally)
Spanish English
little minds."
The major words in the titles of books, articles, and songs (but not short
prepositions or the articles "the," "a," or "an," if they are not the first word of the
title)
One of Jerry's favorite books is The Catcher in the Rye.
Anti-Semitic Chinese
Trademarks
Pepsi IBM
Words and abbreviations of specific names (but not names of things that came from
specific things but are now general types)
Freudian UN
pasteurize italics
Name:
______________________
Date:
____________________
Teacher:
Mr.
Haase
per.
_____
Section:
Student
Toolbox
2.
–ing
word
group
in
the
middle
of
the
sentence:
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family,
sitting
on
the
porch,
watched
the
sun
go
down.
3.
–ing
word
group
at
the
end
of
the
sentence:
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch,
watching
the
sun
go
down.
4.
Adverb
clause
at
the
beginning
of
sentence:
As
the
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch,
they
watched
the
sun
go
down.
5.
Adverb
clause
at
the
end
of
sentence:
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch
in
order
to
watch
the
sun
go
down.
6.
Adjective
immediately
following
noun:
The
family,
quiet
and
close
knit,
sat
on
the
porch,
watching
the
sun
go
down.
7.
Appositive
(actual
word
that
will
serve
as
the
appositive
will
have
to
be
added):
The
quiet,
close-‐knit
family,
the
Smiths,
sat
on
the
porch,
watching
the
sun
go
down.
8.
Noun
followed
by
–ing
word
group
(noun
absolute):
The
sun
having
already
gone
down,
the
quiet,
close-‐knit
family
sat
on
the
porch.
Loose
Sentences:
A
loose
sentence
is
a
type
of
sentence
in
which
the
main
idea
(independent
clause)
comes
first,
followed
by
dependent
grammatical
units
such
as
phrases
and
clauses.
• He went into town to buy groceries, to visit his friends, and to go to the bookstore.
Balanced
Sentences:
A
balanced
sentence
is
a
sentence
that
uses
parallel
structure
of
roughly
the
same
length
and
importance.
"It was the best of times, it was the worst of times..." (A Tale of Two Cities)
"White
chickens
lay
white
eggs,
and
brown
chickens
lay
brown
eggs;
so
if
white
cows
give
white
milk,
do
brown
cows
give
chocolate
milk?"
Parallel Sentences: Sentences with a a balance of two or more similar words, phrases, or clauses.
Inverted
Sentences:
An
inverted
sentence
is
one
in
which
the
subject
appears
after
the
verb.
This
gives
the
subject
more
emphasis.
• In
the
garden
stand
the
statues.
• On
the
desk
are
red
pens.
Name:
______________________
Date:
____________________
Teacher:
Mr.
Haase
per.
_____
Section:
Projects
and
Assessments
1. What
style
of
sentences
can
you
find?
List
the
number
of
loose,
balanced,
and
parallel
*
sentences.
If
you
have
no
sentences
of
one
of
these
types
in
your
paper,
rewrite
some
sentences
in
that
style.
b. One I added:
d. One I added:
f. One I added:
2. How
long
are
your
sentences?
Count
words
in
the
paper,
count
sentences,
and
divide
to
arrive
at
an
average
length.
Number
of
words
_____
/
Number
of
sentences
_____
=
_____
words/sentence.
3. Find
your
longest
sentence.
It
has
_____
words.
The
sentence
before
it
has
_____
words.
The
sentence
after
it
has
_____
words.
If
that
long
sentence
is
not
either
preceded
or
followed
by
a
short
sentence,
change
one
of
them
to
a
short
sentence.
c. to this one:
4. What
forms
are
your
sentences?
Count
and
identify
them
below.
If
you
do
not
have
variety,
rewrite
some
sentences
to
include
these
sentence
types.
b. One I added:
e. Complex sentences:
f. One I added:
5. Count
the
number
of
to
be
verbs
(is,
am,
are,
was,
were,
be,
being,
been).
Find
three
that
can
better
be
expressed
as
action
verbs
and
rewrite
the
sentences
that
way.
c. to this one:
6. Have
you
inverted
any
sentences?
If
not,
rewrite
one
to
do
so.
The
inverted
sentence
I
(had
/
created)
is:
7. Count
how
many
times
you
use
of:
_____,
in:
_____,
to:
_____,
and
by:
_____.
Aim
to
use
each
word
one
fewer
time.
b. to this one:
8. Find
and
color-‐code
all
of
your
pronouns.
Match
each
with
its
antecedent
by
color-‐coding
that
word
as
well.
CONVERTING
YOUR
EVALUATION
TO
A
HOLISTIC
RUBRIC
SCORE…
MEANING: the extent to which the response Points
Earned
Level
exhibits sound understanding, interpretation, 30-‐34
6
and analysis of the task and texts 27-‐29
5
24-‐26
4
Add scores labeled (m) on the rubric. 21-‐23
3
18-‐20
2
fewer
than
18
1
Add your score (level) from each of these five categories and divide by 30 to get your holistic rubric
grade.
Summer Reading Essay Rubric
Adapted from the New York State English Regents Scoring Key and Rating Guide
Level 6 (91–100) Level 5 (81-90) Level 4 (71-80) Level 3 (61-70) Level 2 (51-60) Level 1 (50 or below)
QUALITY Masters Standard Exceeds Standard Meets Standard Approaches Standard Below Standard No Evidence of Standard
Meaning: the extent to which Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses provide minimal or no
the response exhibits sound establish an in-depth analysis establish a thorough establish a basic understanding establish a basic understanding convey a confused or evidence of textual understanding
understanding, of both texts through the lens understanding of both texts of both texts and make implicit of the texts, but make few or incomplete understanding of and make no connections
interpretation, and analysis of the essential question and through the lens of the essential connections between the superficial connections the texts, making few between the essential question
of the task and texts make insightful connections question and make clear and essential question and the ideas between the essential question connections between the and ideas in the texts.
between the essential question explicit connections between in each text. and the ideas in the texts. essential question and the
and the ideas in each text. the essential question and the texts.
ideas in each text.
Development: the extent to Responses at this level develop Responses at this level develop Responses at this level develop Responses at this level develop Responses at this level are Responses at this level are
which ideas are elaborated ideas clearly and fully, making ideas clearly and consistently, some ideas more fully than ideas briefly, using some incomplete or largely minimal, with no evidence of
using specific and relevant effective use of a wide range of with reference to relevant and others, with reference to evidence from the texts and undeveloped, hinting at development.
evidence from the texts relevant and specific evidence specific evidence and specific and relevant evidence may rely primarily on plot ideas, but references to the
and appropriate literary appropriate literary elements and appropriate literary summary. text are vague, irrelevant,
elements from both texts. from both texts. elements from both texts. repetitive, or unjustified.
Organization: the extent to Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level lack Responses at this level show no
which the response exhibits maintain the focus established maintain the focus established maintain a clear and establish, but fail to maintain, an appropriate focus but focus or organization.
direction, shape, and by the essential question and by the essential question and appropriate focus and exhibit a an appropriate focus. suggest some organization,
coherence exhibit a logical and coherent exhibit a logical sequence of logical sequence of ideas but Responses exhibit a or suggest a focus but lack
structure through skillful use of ideas through use of may lack internal consistency. rudimentary structure but may organization.
appropriate devices and appropriate devices and include some inconsistencies or
transitions. transitions. irrelevancies.
Language Use: the extent to Responses at this level are Responses at this level use Responses at this level use Responses at this level rely on Responses at this level use Responses at this level are
which the response reveals an stylistically sophisticated, language that is fluent and appropriate language, with basic vocabulary, with little language that is imprecise or minimal and use language that is
awareness of audience and using language that is precise original, with evident some awareness of audience awareness of audience or unsuitable for the audience or incoherent or inappropriate.
purpose through effective use and engaging, with a notable awareness of audience and and purpose. Responses purpose. Responses exhibit purpose and reveal little
of words, sentence structure, sense of voice and awareness purpose. Responses vary occasionally make effective use some attempt to vary sentence awareness of how to use
and sentence variety of audience and purpose. structure and length of of sentence structure or length. structure or length for effect, sentences to achieve an
Responses also vary structure sentences to control rhythm but with uneven success. effect.
and length of sentences to and pacing.
enhance meaning.
Conventions: the extent to Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses demonstrate partial Responses at this level Responses at this level Responses at this level are
which the response exhibits demonstrate control of the demonstrate control of the control, exhibiting occasional demonstrate emerging control, demonstrate a lack of control, minimal, making assessment of
conventional spelling, conventions with essentially no conventions, exhibiting errors that do not hinder exhibiting occasional errors exhibiting frequent errors conventions unreliable and may
punctuation, paragraphing, errors, even with sophisticated occasional errors only when comprehension. that hinder comprehension. that make comprehension be illegible or not recognizable as
capitalization, grammar, and language. using sophisticated language. difficult. English.
usage
If the student addresses only one text, the response can be scored no higher than a 3.
If the student writes only a personal response, and makes no reference to the text(s), the response can be scored no higher than a 1.
Responses totally unrelated to the topic, illegible, incoherent, or blank should be given a 0.
A response totally copied from the text(s) with no original student writing should be scored a 0.