Some people say that young people learn useful skills by playing electronic and computer games.

Others say that

young people who play electronic and computer games are wasting their time.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

While some people say that there are possible effects on the young who play electronic and computer games , I would
argue that playing ​many​ games on computer is waste time.

To begin with, there are several reasons why people think it is important for children to play computer games. Firstly, by
using technology early they can learn how to use computers and sharpen some important skills. Many games, such as
puzzle, Sudoku, ​which​ help players develop their logical ability, creativity and problem solving skills. Second, some
electronic games required gamers the concentration and fast reflexes to complete stages in those games like racing,
Pikachu. In this way, they can become independent, and control their daily problems well.

On the other hand, if children spend too much time on playing electronic and computer games, they will get some
disadvantages. Firstly, there are many people especially youth addicted games easily. They waste not only their time but
also money on playing games. This will be proven by looking at many students skipped classes to stay in game shops all
day, and they used money to buy cards for games. Furthermore, playing games a lot affect their health negatively. For
example, children play games all day, even stay overnight in many days. As a result, they will be dizzy, have many
diseases and their family has to spend time, money to take them to the hospital.

In conclusion, there are good reasons why playing electronic and computer games provide useful skills, but I believe that
we should use and play them amount of time reasonably.

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