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- How does the paper present the “issue” section? Is this an effective transition?
Do you have a clear idea why people debate this topic? Can you offer an
alternative way to write this?
While reading the paper I understood the good reasons as to why it should be
introduced to children at a young age, but there was no clear reason as to why
people oppose the idea of this being taught at a young age.
- In this paper, you don’t really have a “traditional” thesis, as you should see in
your sample paper. However, you can still examine the presentation of the
research questions—does the author introduce them well or do they seem like
the author just placed them there?
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The ideas and questions being asked are clear and concise. I follow the question
and their answers throughout most of the paper very well. The question is asked
in the title and immediately into the paragraph I am getting answers as to why
and how.
Research Questions
Look at the 3 or 4 research questions in your sample paper and answer the following questions:
- Just by looking at the research questions, do you think they can carry the paper
forward? In other words, do you think you’d be able to write a 8-10 paper based on
them?
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There are countless things that have happened in America alone that can be linked
back to mental illness. Public shooting, suicide, kidnapping, murder, just to name a
few. So in my opinion the area to explore with his questions alone are limitless.
- How narrow are the questions? Do any of them need to be narrowed down?
I think the question “How did mental illness become popularized” can be narrowed
down to a certain part of the world. For instance just one country.
Research Question 1
• Does the author devote too much time to one point and not explore another idea?
In the first question, the paragraph more or less devotes 2 to three sentences to the
reason as to what it exactly is.
• Does the author inject his/her own opinion? Is there any bias?
Already thing written so far is mostly cited and there seem to be no original ideas
just facts.
• How many sources are used by the author? Do you think the author uses his/her
sources effectively?
With the rough draft their about 4 sources used in the paragraphs.
• Are there too many quotes present? Not enough? Do you feel overwhelmed by how
many are present? Do the quotes fit?
Quotes are not overwhelming in the current state of the paper.
• Are the research question and content related or did the author start to explore
something else?
He stays on his path which is in line with his introduction.
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Research Question 2
• Does the author devote too much time to one point and not explore another idea?
• Does the author inject his/her own opinion? Is there any bias?
• How many sources are used by the author? Do you think the author uses his/her
sources effectively?
• Are there too many quotes present? Not enough? Do you feel overwhelmed by how
many are present? Do the quotes fit?
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• Are the research question and content related or did the author start to explore
something else?
Research Question 3
• Does the author devote too much time to one point and not explore another idea?
• Does the author inject his/her own opinion? Is there any bias?
• How many sources are used by the author? Do you think the author uses his/her
sources effectively?
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• Are there too many quotes present? Not enough? Do you feel overwhelmed by how
many are present? Do the quotes fit?
• Are the research question and content related or did the author start to explore
something else?
Research Question 4
• Does the author devote too much time to one point and not explore another idea?
• Does the author inject his/her own opinion? Is there any bias?
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• How many sources are used by the author? Do you think the author uses his/her
sources effectively?
• Are there too many quotes present? Not enough? Do you feel overwhelmed by how
many are present? Do the quotes fit?
• Are the research question and content related or did the author start to explore
something else?
Primary Research
• Was a survey or interview conducted? Do you know when it was conducted and
where?
Was not included in the rough draft.
• Do you think the survey/interview adds to the paper? Or is the content unrelated?
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• Does the author bring the primary research in discussion with other material?
(Remember, the point of primary research is so that it can engage with a larger
discussion). If so, how so? If not, how would you make it communicate with other
information provided?
Table/Figure/Chart
• Is there a table/figure/chart included? If so, does the author explain it?
Was not included in the rough draft.
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Abstract
After reading the paper, go back to the abstract and answer the following:
Overall Thoughts
• How would you grade this paper? Explain why.
With what limited paper I was given, and my knowledge on how to grade a
paper like this I would give it an A. Simply because it is a rough draft, and if the
rest of the paper follows the structure of his first question. It will be a fine
paper.
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