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by Zach Goldsmith
Pronoun Agreement
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slowly
explain a bit
Gerund
more how this
shows that (that
it's the opposite
of what Theseus
says)
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Good Int egrat ion
I think this demonstrates that there is still something missing from your thesis. In other words it has
its challenges and there is a result because of that. That wasn't clear from just reading your thesis,
but with your different arguments is more apparent.
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knows
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Missing ","
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Good quot es
T ense
Continue with this idea vs going back to the same idea of you've been repeating in your paper.
From Conflict to Harmony: MSND
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Nice work here.
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QM Pronoun Agreement
Make sure that if you use a pronoun to replace a noun, that it agrees with the noun (ie singular
or plural)
Ex: T he women ran the marathon, and she won. --> T he women ran the marathon, and they
won. OR T he woman ran the marathon, and she won.
Ex: One has to do what they want. --> One has to do what one wants. OR T hey have to do
what they want.
Additional Comment
be caref ul of the agreement between pair (singular when preceded by march here) and their
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Nice work here.
Text Comment. In your T S you can probably ref erence T and H specif ically
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QM Gerund
A gerund is a verbal that ends in -ing and f unctions as a noun. T he term verbal indicates that a
gerund, like the other two kinds of verbals, is based on a verb and theref ore expresses action
or a state of being. However, since a gerund f unctions as a noun, it occupies some positions in
a sentence that a noun ordinarily would, f or example: subject, direct object, subject complement,
and object of preposition.
Be careful of using gerunds at the beginning of sentences, as it can affect phrasing at
the end of the sentences if not used correctly.
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Nice work here.
Comment 4
I'm not sure how much this adds to the argument you are making
Comment 5
I'm not sure what you mean by this
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Great, f luid integration
Text Comment. T his latter part f eels more like a recounting of their conversation
Comment 6
Isn't the relationships the same as Hippogrif f s and Oberon, though, in relation to the rules of a
certain "realm"?
I actually think this would be an ef f ective way to transition f rom the f irst paragraph into this one
because it shows the connection between the two.
Text Comment. I think this demonstrates that there is still something missing f rom your
thesis. In other words it has its challenges and there is a result because of that. T hat wasn't
clear f rom just reading your thesis, but with your dif f erent arguments is more apparent.
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Nice work here.
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QM Good Integration
Great, f luid integration
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New paragraph:
When a paragraph gets too long your reasoning may appear jumbled and conf used. Paragraphs
are the steps that allow your reader to make progress through your paper. Without enough
steps, the argument becomes dif f icult to f ollow. Usually there are subtle shif ts of emphasis
within a long paragraph that can become a paragraph break. T ry to f igure out what your
paragraph's main point is so that your reader doesn't have to.
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Additional Comment
even
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Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
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Comment 12
I'm not sure this sis necessary, since Puck's alternation of their love is really dif f erent that that
of Egeus.
QM Good Integration
Great, f luid integration
QM Good quotes
Good use of quotes that help support your argument.
QM Past/Present Progressive
to be + present participle
QM Tense
Use present tense
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Text Comment. Continue with this idea vs going back to the same idea of you've been
repeating in your paper.
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Missing "," You may need to place a comma af ter this word.