Please look at your draft and do the following:

STEP #1

Look at your ​SENTENCES​. Then, look at the ​FIRST LETTER​ of the ​FIRST​ word. Think
about what you are supposed to do with the ​FIRST LETTER​ of a ​SENTENCE ​and do
that NOW.

STEP #2

● Look at your ​SENTENCES ​again.

● Look and see if you have any ​SPECIFIC NAMES​ (​e.g. Aslan, Lucy​), ​SPECIFIC
PLACES​ (​e.g. Narnia, Cair Paravel​), or any ​SPECIFIC OBJECTS (e.g. the Stone
Table)​.

● Look at the examples in ​PARENTHESES​ ABOVE and then look at the FIRST ​LETTERS
of the examples. Then ​DOUBLE CHECK​ any ​SPECIFIC NAMES, SPECIFIC PLACES​,
and ​SPECIFIC OBJECTS ​in your ​SCRIPT​ and make any corrections.

STEP #3
 ● Make sure that all of your sentences have ​ENDING PUNCTUATION​.​ (e.g . ! ? )

STEP #4

● Look and make your sentences talk about ​SOMEONE​ (​e.g. Aslan​) or ​SOMETHING
(e.g.the White Witch)​, or ​SOMEPLACE​ ​(e.g. Narnia)​. These are the ​SUBJECTS​ of your
SENTENCES.

● Then, look and make sure your ​SUBJECT​ is ​DOING SOMETHING​ or ​IS SOMETHING​.
What they are ​DOING​ or words like ​IS, ARE, WAS, and WERE​ are ​VERBS.

● What they are ​DOING ​is an ​ACTION VERB​. Words like ​IS, ARE, WAS​, and ​WERE
connect ​SUBJECTS​ to what they ​ARE.​ These are ​LINKING VERBS​.

STEP #5

● Reread your sentences. Each ​SUBJECT​ should have a ​VERB. ​I will be looking at this
when I determine your​ GRADE.

● If you have ​MORE​ than ​TWO PAIRS​ of ​SUBJECTS AND VERBS​, you have A ​ RUN ON
SENTENCE,​ You are going to need to ​SEPARATE​ them so that you have ​NO MORE
than ​TWO PAIRS​ of S
​ UBJECTS​ and ​VERBS​ in a sentence.

​Example of a RUN ON SENTENCE

​Edmund slipped ​and fell on the banana, and ​Lucy battled​ the White Witch, and ​she
was​ really, really, really unhappy.

● PROOFREAD​ to see if you have any ​RUN ON SENTENCES​. ​HIGHLIGHT​ them in any
color you choose. Please use the ​SAME COLOR​. If you think a​ SENTENCE ​is a ​RUN
ON SENTENCE​ but are not SURE. Raise your hand and we will ​DISCUSS.

STEP #6
 ● Look at any ​RUN ON SENTENCES ​you have.​ IF​ you have​ NO RUN ON SENTENCES,
go on to​ STEP #7.

● CHOOSE​ one of the following ​OPTIONS​ and ​DO IT.

1) Look at the FIRST ​TWO​ sentences. Use a ​COMMA​ and a ​FANBOYS​ to connect them if
you do NOT have one already. ​(FANBOYS = FOR, AND, NOR, BUT, OR, YET, or SO)

Use a​ FANBOYS ​that makes sense. Then, put a period. Make the ​THIRD​ sentence a
SEPARATE​ sentence.

RUN ON:

Edmund slipped ​and fell on the banana, and ​Lucy battled​ the White Witch, and
she was ​ really, really, really unhappy.

CORRECT:

​Edmund slipped ​and fell on the banana, and ​Lucy battled​ the White Witch.

She was​ really unhappy.

2) Look at the LAST ​TWO​ sentences. Use a ​COMMA​ and a ​FANBOYS​ to connect them if
you do NOT have one already. ​(FANBOYS = FOR, AND, NOR, BUT, OR, YET, or SO)
Use a​ FANBOYS ​that makes sense. Then, put a period. Make the ​THIRD​ sentence a
SEPARATE​ sentence.

RUN ON:

Edmund slipped ​and fell on the banana, and ​Lucy battled​ the White Witch, and
they were​ really, really, really unhappy.

CORRECT:

Edmund slipped ​and fell on the banana.

Lucy battled​ the White Witch, and ​she were​ really unhappy.

(Examples of how to use the FANBOYS are on the LANGUAGE PAGE of my

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