If you are in charge of a company and have some money available, which would you prefer to do?

1 Redesign the company

2 Add facilities and equipment

Broadly speaking, money is an important factor that should be spent carefully. So paramount is making
the most out of the available budget that a person in charge of a company should spend it in the most
efficacious way possible. In this regard, it has been a subject of contention how the money should be
spent in a company. While many are under the impression that this money should be allocated to
redesign the company, others oppose it by stating that it is a good idea to spend it on adding facilities
and equipment. When it comes to me, I find myself more sympathetic to the second thesis. In the
ensuing paragraphs, I will elucidate my perspective through two legitimate reasons.

The first imperative reason is that this amount of money can be allotted to increase the efficiency of the
company. In other words, when a company buys modern equipment, it is more likely that their products
become of higher quality. As a result, efficiency of the production lines in a company increases.(you
should have mentioned those companies which do not produce anything but give out services) To shed
more light on the claim, imagine a German company manufacturing vacuum cleaners that has renewed
its equipment to take advantage of new systems. If the company had not gone toward using the latest
equipment (do not forget to use inversion in this golden opportunity: had the company not gone…),
they would have encountered difficulties competing with their rivals. Unlike adding equipment to the
company, redesign of a company does not interfere with the product of a company and its quality.

Your specific support is more than general

The second appealing point which deserves to be brought up here is that should the company add more
facilities, they will spend the money wisely by providing the workers with a bus service. By doing so, the
workers are less nervous about getting to work on time as well as spending less money on their
commute. Because, a bus gets collects them every day based on a scheduled plan. A notable example of
which is the bus service collecting workers of Mercedes Benz car company that facilitates their
commute. In fact, the more a company adds facilities, the more the workers are satisfied with their
job conditions which in turn affects them in a way that they use all of their potential at work. (You
could propose this bolded sentence before specific support)

I think your second reason is not as strength as the first one (it’s a bit specific)

To recapitulate, having investigated the preceding ideas, I prefer adding facilities and equipment rather
than the redesign of the company (appending facilities and equipment is far better than redesingning a
company). Not only can a company heighten the efficiency but also the workers can (to avoid repeating:
are able to) commute easily using a bus service. To the best of the author’s knowledge, by spending
money this way, the grade of company will soon improve.
In conclusion it’s better not to use “ I ” because conclusion is short and your opinion stands out too
much!

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