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LAKSMI ​JUST CORRECTED​ NEXT LIVE WILL APPEAR ABOVE THIS POINT 

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● Remember, the letter is written to a pharmacist! 

10 March 2018 

The Pharmacist 

Dear Sir/Madam 

Ref: Mrs Luca Luke, 75 years 

I am writing an account of the above mentioned client who requires a re education regarding ​the inhaler usage​ in 
order to improve her breathing pattern. 

● “...regarding the usage of inhaler…” 

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Mrs Luke has been suffering from chronic obstructive pulmonary disease for which she is on salbutamol and 
ipratropium inhalers. Presently, she exhibits increased shortness of breath, especially during the ​daytime 
activities which ​she​ resolves ​by​ ​with​ rest. In addition to ​that​ her treatment with salbutamol was ​also f​ ound to be 
ineffective ​therefore ​she ​was commenced ​with ventolin inhaler. ​Moreover​ her inhaler usage was observed to be 
inappropriate which ​results her worsen situation. 

● By + human beings / animals 

● With + tools that human beings use. 
● Comma after “that” 
● “Also was found” is giving way to confusion. We use also to add up to something mentioned previously. 
There is no mention of “ineffective” earlier. 
● We cannot use a “therefore” in the middle of a sentence (generally) 
● A comma must be used after “Moreover” 
● The last part is totally broken!!! 
○ “Which has resulted in the worsening of her condition…” 
○ “Situation is not a match there! 
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Mrs Luke was educated regarding the use of an inhaler with spacer but she was not ready to follow that. She 
claims that her ​pharmacists​ ​was​ ​had​ taught her a different method of administration. 

● Pharmacists or pharmacist? 
● “Pharmacist was taught” is passive so the pharmacist was taught by someone else!!! 
 ● Next and closing! 

In view of the above, it would be greatly beneficial if you could teach Mrs Luke the exact method of using inhaler 
with spacer. Kindly make sure that she uses ​the​ inhaler in a proper way in order to control her breathing 
problems. 

Should you have any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. 

Yours sincerely, 
District Nurse 

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DISA ​JUST CORRECTED 

Dr Kelly Feenandez 
148 Douglas Ave 
South Perth WA 
Australia 

● Remember, we are writing to a doctor. 

● The patient is a 63 year old man. Let’s see! 
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14 August 2019  

● The case note does not provide a date so you can write today’s date. 

Ref: Mr Charles Gardinal, 63 years old 

● Just “63 years” is enough. “Old” is not necessary 

● Next paragraphed  

Dear Dr Kelly 

This letter will introduce Mr ​Charles​ G

​ ardiner​ ​w​ho was recently diagnosed with ​a​ngina and has been recovering 
from the operation for the same. ​who​ ​He​ requires your expertise ​for his​ ​to​ care and management. 

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● Let’s check the next paragraph 

Mr ​Gardiner​ presented to this hospital on 17 October with the complaints of pain, anterior chest tightness and 
discomfort suggestive of cardiac problem. ​Hence​ ​for which​ a ​m​yocardial ​p​erfusion scintigraphy was performed 
which confirmed the diagnosis. For ​which​ ​this​ ​Mr Charles underwent operation. 

● Weak sentence framing. 

● Do not start a sentence with “Hence” 
● Understand the difference between “for which” (middle) and “for this” (starting) 
● Do not first-letter-Caps for disease names. 
● Let’s move to the next 

M​e​ ​Gardiner ​Gardiner’s​ medical history reveals that he ​is​ ​has been​ hypertensive since 2010. Moreov​er​ he has 
been suffering from incontinence of bladder, mild ​D​ysphasia and hearing impairm​ent​ I​ ​n addition to that, he uses 
walking aids. However, ​he​ ambulates independently and his speech is clear. Of no​te​ his body weight is 177lbs. 
 ● Look at the errors. 
● Me > Mr 
● Charles > Charles’ 
● Has been is used with since and for. 
● There should be a comma after “Moreover/ However / So, Also (when they come first in a sentence. 
● Full stop after “impairment” 
● Comma after “Of note” 
● Be careful!!! 

Socially, Mr ​Gardiner ​resides with his son hence he is the primary caregiver. He does not have special habits. 

● A comma is not necessary after socially. 

● It is time to consider if “Socially” is really needed. 
● Let’s move on to the next part and conclude. 

In the light of the above circumstances ​described above​, it would be greatly appreciated if you could provide 
necessary care and support for ​his​ ​Mr ​Gardiner’s​ speedy recovery. 

● Remember, we need to use the patient’s name when it is needed first time in a new paragraph. 
● Next 

Please do not hesitate to contact me for further information. All relevant documents are attached within the 
letter. 

Y​ours sincerely 
Charge Nurse  
Mount Lawley Private Hospital. 

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SUPRIYA’S LETTER ​JUST CORRECTED 

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● The letter we are going to assess is written by a new student of mine. 
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● The letter is written to the mother of the patient, a child of four years.  
● By mistake, the writer addressed the patient as Mr. 

16 September, 2016 

Mrs Rupali Srivastava 

Level 6,16 QVT Terrace 
319 Swanston Street 
Melbourne VIC 3000 
Australia. 

Dear Mrs ​S​rivastava, 

 ● Missed a Capital S 

I am writing regarding ​Mr srivatava’s​ ​your son’s​ future care requirements after he ​has been​ i​ s​ discharged. His 
recovery has been encouraging so far but continued car at home ​will be​ ​is​ necessary. 

● Please take note of the corrections carefully. 

● Let’s go to the next paragraph. Remember, the next para is admission and medical history. 
● 80% of that section is past and the rest is present perfect (has/has been) and simple present. 

As you know, during hospitalization of ​your son​, a chest X-Ray and CT scan were performed which confirmed t​ he 
presence of​ two large cysts with parenchyma in his left lung. Therefore, he underwent fibre-optic bronchoscopy 
and left thoracostomy. Moreover, an intercostal tube was inserted successfully postoperatively and both the cysts 
were removed and ​sent for histopathological studies​. ​pleural effusion along with broncho- alveolar lavage were 
sent for histopathological studies​. 

● Critical issue detected!!! 

● “Pleural effusion along with broncho- alveolar lavage were sent for histopathological studies” 
● The silly mistake will cost you 30000 + 10000 rupees! 
● Pleural effusion and lavage are processes. You cannot send them!! 
● Please be careful with medical terms. 
● That last part should be like, “Besides, pleural effusion along with broncho-alveolar lavage have been 
performed.” 
● All done. Next paragraph? Ready? 

I am glad to inform ​that,​ Mr Srivastava made significant progress in his condition during his stay. However, 
compliance with medication needs to be monitor​ed​. ​Kindly,​ continue Albendazole 200 mg twice a day orally for 
the next 30 days and Cefuroxime 250 mg every 12 hourly for 10 days. It is worth noting ​that,​ in the next 4 days 
Mr Srivastava has ​an​ follow-up appointment in ​the​ OPD for intercostal tube ​and the removal of​ stitches. 

● Do not put a comma after “that” 

● No need of comma after “Kindly” 
● ...has a follow up… 
● ...be monitored ...” 
● All clear? 
● Lets move to the closing. 

I would be happy to get involved in the care ​for​ ​of​ ​your son​ by furnishing any vital information that would help 
you render appropriate care for him. 

Yours sincerely, 
Registered Nurse. 

● Please remember! All the green words are added by me. That means you miss out many words. 
● Red words and lines indicate serious errors. 
● Orange means “not recommended” 
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BINU’S LETTER 
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Ms Nita Robetrs 
In-Home Nursing Service 
79 Beachside Street 
Bayview   
15 July, 2017 

Dear Ms Roberts, 

Re: Mrs Jasmine Thompson , DOB: 01/07/1942 

I am writing to refer Mrs Thompson, an elderly widow who is being discharged today following a total right 
shoulder replacement due to osteoarthritis. She requires in-home care and assistance.  

● The purpose is well documented!! Nothing is missing! 

● Next 

Mrs Thompso​n’s​ postoperative phase has been unremarkable and her wound is clean and dry. She has been 
compliant with physiotherapy regimen and her ​bloods​ were in normal limits. Her postoperative pain was managed 
with analgesia and cold compresses, and Panadine forte has been prescribed if required to control her pain.  

● What’s “bloods”? 
● Binu, you are here? 
● Please reply on whatsapp. 
● Okay, let’s move on. 

Following discharge, Mrs Thompson will wear a right arm sling for four weeks during which time she ​is​ not to do 
any lifting. She will be attending physiotherapy twice a week at our outpatient department and hydrotherapy 
once a week. In next 10 days a follow-up visit has been arranged to have her staples removed. In the event of any 
concerns, an Orthopedic Joint Replacement nurse specialist can be contacted. 

● Very well done. Perfection of knowledge and Clinical knowledge. 

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In addition to monitoring, it would be greatly appreciated if ​you​ could assist Mrs Thompson with showering and 
administration of Clexane subcutaneously for four days ​as deep vein thrombosis prophylaxis​. Please note, her 
daughter will be staying with her for the next month.  

● Some oranges are missing! 

● I mean, that orange section is not coherent. Did you miss something? 
● Did you mean, “...for deep vein thrombosis…? 
● Or, “as she also has deep v thromb…” 
● As a preventive measure for dvt  
● That settles the matter. All the best Binu.  
● It will be. Be Cool. Do not get panic of any sort. Tomorrow’s is an experience that is rare but is you have 
confidence, you will perform well. 
● Hoping for a productive tomorrow. 
● Thank you Binu for letting our guests to join your correction.  
● Thank you sir for ur great support and all the best for all OET aspirants.  
● All the best everyone. Good night. 

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any queries. 

Yours sincerely, 
Registered Nurse 

● Score is definitely B 
● All the Best Binu. You are here, please say! 
● About that deep vein issue 
MAYOOKHA’S LETTER 
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22 June, 2011 

The Renal Clinical Nurse Specialist 

Bunbury Community Health Center  

Dear Sir/Madam, 

Ref: Mr Dallas Walters, 51 years 

● Very carefully you wrote these lines. 

● Next 

I am writing to furnish an account of Mr Walters who underwent an insertion of continuous peritoneal dialysis 
catheter secondary to chronic renal failure. He requires ongoing care and management from your facility as he is 
being discharged today.  

● Nothing to correct. 
● Next 

On 16 ​of this month​ ​June​, Mr Walters was admitted for the above mentioned procedure which was performed 
successfully. During hospitalization, hyperkalemic managements were done. At present, he ​is​ ​has​ recuperated 
well and his potassium level is back to normal.  

● Remember? No need to repeat month or year if the events are happening in the same month/year as the 
letter is composed. 
●  

A disability pensioner for schizophrenia, Mr Walters lives with his supportive wife and children. Currently, his 
mental status is stable ​and it is​ confirmed by the mental health liaison. Please note, he has been a known case of 
diabetes.  

● Good. Next 

In view of the above circumstances, no word would amply express my gratitude towards your willingness to be 
involved in the ongoing care of Mr Walters and to do the needful for his speedy recovery. Kindly monitor him for 
signs and symptoms of peritonitis and psychosis. Please educate them about Catheter care and importance of 
minimising potassium intake in diet. It is a good idea to link them with ​a​ community health worker for further 
education. It is worth noting that his medications will be forwarded by the medical officer. 

● All good. 

If you have any queries regarding Mr Walters, I will be most obliged to provide you with speedy information. 

Yours sincerely,  
Registered Nurse 

● Score - 360+ 
● All Safe.  

LIVIA’S LETTER 
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Alvin Myran  
ATK Care Home, 58 Spencer Hill Rd 
Wimbledon, London, SW19 4EL,UK 

27 August 2016 

Dear Alvin Myran, 

Ref: Mr Alfue Coleman, 

I am writing to introduce Mr Coleman who was admitted to our hospital on 17th of August with complains of 
extreme abdominal pain. He is scheduled for discharge today and he will need you to provide continued care at 
your nursing home. 

● As the dates are in the same month, never repeat the month. 
● Next 

Upon admission, Mr Colema​n’s​ physical examination showed an abdominal mass on ​his​ t​ he​ left side of his 
abdomen and mild pitting edema on his both lower extremities. A CT scan was performed which confirmed a 
hematoma with unclear border and a maximal diameter of 5.5. In addition to that, a severe hypersplenotrophy, 
peritonitis, hepatosteatosis and seroperitoneum were observed. 

● Good language. Subject - Verb agreement is also strong.  

● Next 

Mr Coleman’s treatment straight away commenced on concentrated red cell, low flow oxygen, 2 types of 
antibiotics, combined spironolactone 60mg a day and his oral intake was reduced to 1 litre a day. Additionally, 
fresh frozen plasma, vitamin K and human serum albumin with furosemide were injected daily. Moreover, a 
paracentesis of the chest was performed. 

● Good but why all the medicine details? 

● You are not writing to a doctor. 

Four days later, Mr Colema​n’s​ breathing difficulty increased and his overall condition continued to deteriorate. 
Moreover, a large area of ecchymosis could be observed in his left part of the abdomen and for that reason a 
chest puncture was used to ​relieve​ the symptoms. 

● Next. 

On 22 of August, Mr Coleman was showing signs of improvement in his hemoglobin level but he was still having 
pleural effusion as a preventive measure. 

● Good. No errors. 

Two days prior to discharge, Mr Colema​n’s​ laboratory test showed great improvement with no obvious edema of 
the lower limb and he hardly had any parapneumonic effusion and pyoperitoneum. For that reason, today, Mr 
Coleman is ready for discharge and he will need a 3 months stay at your nursing home as per doctor’s suggestion. 

● The last error detected!!!! 

● You are not using apostrophe! 
● Mr Coleman’s 
● Mr Joseph’s 
● Ms Alice’ 
● The two boys’ 
● The boy’s 
 ● Note the position of apostrophe in Alice’ and Boys’ 
● There is no s after apostrophe (‘) because the two words end with S sound. 
● Please take note of that. 

Socially Mr Coleman lives with his wife and his two children with whom he runs a roofing company. 

● The social history is not important here. If you decide to include social history, add that to the previous 
paragraph or to the request paragraph. 

If you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact me. 

Yours sincerely, 
Nurse 

LIVIA’S LETTER 
CORRECTED 

Dr Sharka Evan 
Head Doctor, AVTS Hospital 
503 Chapel St, Prahran 
VIC 3181, Australia 

15 March 2010 

Dear Dr Evan, 

Ref: Atul Fian, aged 9 months. 

I am writing to request further assessment and care for Atul, a nine -month-old boy who was born with 
microcephaly from a consanguineous marriage. He was admitted to our hospital with failure to thrive, extreme 
irritability and intermittent fever. 

● Super starting! Next 

During hospitalization, Atul underwent a series of investigations like urine organic acid test, liver function test, 
acylcarnitine profile and plasma lactate test and all result came ​back​ ​out​ into normal range. 

● Good. Next 

Considering the normal results of the above investigations, Atul underwent further investigation like CGH that 
showed a 2,31 Mb microdeletion at xp 22, 11p21,3 , containing 15 genes including the ARX gene. Moreover, Atul 
had an MRI of the brain that showed microcephaly, moderate ventriculomegaly, diffuse and decreased caliber of 
the brain stem and a thin corpus callosum. He was also having an increased amount of CSF signal in the posterior 
fossa represented by a prominent cisterna magna. Furthermore, an extensive abnormal hyperintense signal on 
the frontal, parietal, temporal and occipital lobes were seen through the periventricular and subcortical white 
matter. In addition to the above tests , Atul had also the molecular test for AGS which showed an apparent 
homozygous deletion of exons 14 and 15 in the SAMHD genes. 

● Ahhhhh! What was that, Livia!!! You did marvelously! Could not find error (although I am not a Med) 
● Next! 

Atul has a past medical history of hypertonia and a global development delay. It is important to know that Atul's 
mother is an aicardi-goutieres syndrome (AGS) carrier and his father has the mutation but is asymptomatic. 

The patient's genetic counselling and symptomatic management were done and this letter will accompany Atul to 
the AVTS Hospital upon his discharge tomorrow. 
Yours sincerely, 
Nurse 

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