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V d
Nguyn mu
It is common knowledge that convenient stores,
pharmacies and supermarkets are applied to franchising
corporations popularly, but extend a great deal of outlet unit
not best way, on account of it will attack franchisees in
existence.
Sa i
As convenient stores, pharmacies and supermarkets are
common examples of franchising corporations, too many
franchise outlets will negatively impact the generated
revenues of other franchisees belonging to the same
corporation.

V d
Nguyn mu
There is a need to secure franchisees income and economize
the use of corporations operating resource by the franchisor
that needs to limit in specific trade area. But franchisors have
not objective fashion to select the best one when there are
two or upward person will join the chain store.
Sa i
A franchiser must limit its number of expanded outlets to
secure stable revenues for existing franchisees and
economize its use of corporate operating resources. However,
franchisers lack an objective means of selecting the most
promising franchisee intent on joining the chain store.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is apparent that the quality of life and education in Taiwan
improve, consequently the people also more and more take own
health concern. Therefore, it also drives development of the
relevant industry of medical. If the hospital operation is very
good, the home care, the drugstore or the healthy food store
can derive.
Sa i
Enhanced living standards and educational levels in Taiwan
have fostered a strong public health consciousness, fuelling the
development of the medical sector. Effective hospital operations
definitely contribute to the maturation of the homecare,
pharmaceutical and health food sectors.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is commonly viewed that conventional organization
performance evaluate over rely on oneself and they aimed at
defect improve. They will not tell somebody especially
competition or cooperation industry. Therefore, competition or
cooperation industry must be understood the hospitals
organization performance or operation.
Sa i
Generally viewed as too subjective, conventional evaluation
models focus mainly on eliminating defects rather than providing
information regarding competing or cooperative sectors,
knowledge of which is vital to enhancing organizational
performance or operations.

V d
Nguyn mu
It goes without saying that chain store is an important
business model and has two types in substance, one is
regular store and the other one is franchising. Regular store is
more concerted in operations from franchiser, but invest too
much finance and manpower, it will be obstruct to develop.
Sa i
As an important business model, chain stores take the form of
either a regular store or a franchise. A regular store focuses
on operations from the perspective of a franchiser by
investing much capital and personnel to ensure further
development.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is widely known that the Hsinchu City Government is heavily
promoting the use of public transportation to alleviate the growing
heavy traffic. However, the obsolete routes and services of the
public transportation, city bus, can not meet the citizens needs that
shifted as the science park developed in recent years.
Sa i
The Hsinchu City Government aggressively advocates public
transportation use to alleviate the growing traffic congestion.
However, obsolete bus routes and public transportation have failed
to satisfy consumer demand, especially given the rapid
development of the Hsinchu Science-based Industrial Park in recent
years.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is a normal practice that private sectors of traditional
industry file visitor information as valuable database for
relationship maintenance. However, the paper-based fail to
present systematic and updated data, causing inefficiency in
contacting with these potential customers.
Sa i
Private enterprises often enter visitor information into their
databases as a form of customer relations management.
However, paper-based documentation is often unsystematic
and inefficient when identifying and contacting potential
customers.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is certain key information of the data, such
as e-mail address or telephone number,
becomes invalid due to the difficulty to
renew the database.
Sa i
The failure to upgrade database contents
invalidates outdated information, including
e-mail addresses and telephone numbers.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is crucial to develop a hi-speed wireless network
system. With high data rate of wireless network, the
goal of watching real-time video programs can even be
reached and we can watch TV programs everywhere
and anytime without taking cables with us.
Sa i
Developing a hi-speed wireless network system with a
high data rate could greatly facilitate real-time video
transmissions and programming without conventional
constraints of place, time or cables.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is known that traditional distribution system can only
support the message transfer in the mobile network. If
we dont develop a new distribution system for mobile
network, we can not communicate with each other.
Sa i
Conventional distribution systems can only transfer
messages in a mobile network. The inability to develop
a distribution system for mobile networks severely
limits communications between wireless users.

V d
Nguyn mu
There is a need for a context-aware
algorithm, which can make message
transfer between nodes efficiently.
Sa i
A context-aware algorithm must be
developed, capable of transferring
messages between nodes efficiently.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is well known that the present computer stores data in the storage
device (e.g., Hard disk), without encrypted, in other words, everyone
has copies of the data can easily read and modify it, although there has
many software programs that can perform the data encryption, but the
encryption key is also stored on storage device, so this type of
protection only complicates the process of retrieving data, not truly
protects the data in essence.
Sa i
Computers store data in unencrypted data devices, e.g., hard disks,
making it easy to read and modify such data. Despite the availability of
numerous software data encryption programs, the encryption key is
also stored on a storage device, further complicating the data retrieval
process and leaving the data not entirely protected.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is shown statistically, in the past five years, the
malicious programs and tampering of confidential
data create a cost of over 75 billion US dollars
every year.
Sa i
Statistics over the past five years indicate that
malicious programs and the tampering of
confidential data cost enterprises over $US
75,000,000,000 annually.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is noted that the requirement of wireless
network is increasing quickly. By wireless
communication, information must be
transferred more conveniently and comfortably.
Sa i
Wireless networks must transform information
efficiently and conveniently to comply with
consumer demand in wireless communications.

V d
Nguyn mu
It goes without saying that the security issue of electronic
data and copyright are getting increasingly attention,
however the computer nowadays is not reliable in data
protection. Malicious programs such as virus can easily
danger the confidential data stored in computers.
Sa i
Despite increasing security concerns over electronic data
and copyright protection, malicious programs such as
viruses can easily compromise confidential data storied
in computers.

V d
Nguyn mu
It was a trend that mobile phones became more popular from the end
of 2002, and the mobile phone number/population percentage was
over 100%. It was then that Taiwan became the top one country in
the world. At the third season quarter of 2003, it even reached 113%,
which mean that there were with 25275000 subscribers at that time
and every 100 people have 113 mobile phone numbers in the
average.
Sa i
Mobile phones have pervaded daily life since the end of 2002, as
evidenced by the number of subscribers in Taiwan surpassing the
entire population. That percentage increased to 113% by the third
quarter of 2003, with 25,275,000 subscribers island wide, or an
average of 113 mobile phone numbers per 100 individuals.

V d
Nguyn mu
It was found from the results of a survey study recently that 6
millions subscribers dont satisfy their current telecom operators
and 4 millions subscribers want to change the operators.
Because of the inconvenience and complex of the changing
original used number, many subscribers cannot but succumb to
the original operator.
Sa i
A recent survey indicated that two-thirds of 6,000,000
subscribers dissatisfied with their current service providers want
to switch operators. However, many of those individuals find it
impossible to do so given the inconvenience of changing the
original mobile phone number.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is noted that if several tree graphs have the same
number of tree nodes, then the tree graph with star
shape would have the highest eigenvalue among all
of tree graphs. This is because of the compactness of
the star.
Sa i
Several tree graphs with the same number of tree
nodes imply that the tree graph with a star shape has
the highest eigenvalue among all tree graphs, as
attributed to the compactness of the star.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is seen that computer misconfiguration can be
significantly decreased with a good security
configuration guide. Also, unpatched system can also
be improved by setting computer patched
automatically.
Sa i
A reliable security configuration guide can significantly
decrease the likelihood of computer misconfiguration.
Also, automatically setting the computer patch can
enhance the unpatched system.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is found that collected intrusion trace data which can reveal
security weakness point in the software, it provides security
professionals or researchers to study further the origin of
vulnerabilities in the software and improves software quality
and develops new a patch and then releases to the public.
Sa i
Accumulating intrusion trace data can reveal security
limitations in software, providing secuirty profrssionals or
researchers with the tools to elucidate further the origin of
vulnerabilities in software, enhance software quality and
develop a new patch for public release.

V d
Nguyn mu
It was the recommendation of that study that the four
measures: setting fuel efficiency standard for new vehicles,
promoting hybrid vehicles, requirement of low emission
vehicle for fleet, and settle vehicle use limitation in rush
hours, should be initiated in Taiwans near future.
Sa i
That study recommended four timely measures for Taiwan,
i.e. establishing a fuel efficiency standard for new vehicles,
promoting hybrid vehicles, mandating low emission
vehicles for fleets, and limiting vehicular use during rush
hour traffic.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is found that the percentage of metro users have increased drastically given the
last quarter of average number of metro passengers are more than the annual
average number of metro users of 2009 by nearly 200 people, corresponding to
Zhao (2009)s founding that there is a trend of urban transport demand shifting from
taxies and buses to rail transits. Therefore, the policy scenarios are designed
according to the trend of ascending number in the volume of metro users, given that
the overall public transport ridership remains the same.
Sa i
The number of metro passengers has significantly increased in percentage, as
evidenced by their average number reaching nearly 200 during 2009 over the same
period of the previous year. This finding corresponds to the observation of Zhao
(2009) of a trend of shifting demand in urban transportation from taxis and buses to
rail transit. Subsequent transportation policies thus reflect the growing volume trend
of metro passengers, given that the overall number of public transportation
passengers remains the same.

V d
Nguyn mu
It was summarized that, for LDVs, fossil or nuclear feedstock, the
percentage changes in CO2-equivalent emissions lie between
-27.6% and 102.1%; for LDVs, biomass feedstock, the percentage
changes in CO2-equivalent emissions lie between -65.0% and
10.9%; for Battery EVs, the percentage changes in CO2-equivalent
emissions lie between -99.0% and -22.7%.
Sa i
According to their results, for LDVs, fossil or nuclear feedstock,
CO2-equivalent emissions range from a change of -27.6% to
102.1%; for LDVs, biomass feedstock, CO2-equivalent emissions
range from a change of -65.0% to 10.9%; and for battery EVs, CO2equivalent emissions range from a change of -99.0% to -22.7%.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is noticed that few efforts have been made for the
assessment of COS emmision focusing on the
specific trips of different transport modes in the
megacities of China.
Sa i
Notably, CO2 emissions have seldom been
assessed with respect to specific patterns of various
transportation modes in Chinese megacities.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is the aim to address the energy consumed by transport
sector and the CO2 emissions generated by Shanghai, which
is the most commercialized city equipped with the highest
cutting edge passenger transport technological infrastructure.
Sa i
Of priority concern is to address the energy consumed by the
transportation sector and subsequent CO2 emissions
generated in Shanghai, the largest commercial center in
China that is equipped with the most advanced infrastructure
for passenger transportation.

V d
Nguyn mu
It is possible to create many designs with
the software.
Sa i
Many designs can be created with the
software.

Ti liu tham kho

Knoy, T (1999) Editing Workbook for
Chinese Technical Writers. Taipei: Yang
Chih Publishing
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Knoy, T (2000) Advanced Copyediting
Practice for Chinese Technical Writers.
Taipei: Yang Chih Publishing
www.chineseowl.idv.tw/html/b5.htm

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